In Daryl Cagle's illustration of the differences in the way education is seen between 1960 and 2010 he is trying to say that the generation that was raised in the 60's and were blamed for their grades now go and blame their kids teacher for the bad grades. The dad in both pictures look the same hinting that they are father and son which would make sense given the time gap. The second most striking element is how the kid in 2010 looks like he is just mimicking his parents rage and it doesn't really seem like he cares about his grades at all. This is opposed to the kid in 1960 who does seem to care about his grades; this alludes to the fact that the kid who is blamed for his grades care way more and actually values his education opposed to the kid who's parent's blame the teacher for his shortcomings.
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Daryl Cagle's graphic image shows the drastic change between two different time periods. The illustrator portrayed the situation of each image in different ways compared to each's time period. The image of 1960 shows that the parents are dressed very differently. IN 1960, they are dressed in semi-formal attire. On the other hand, the parents in 2010 are dressed in more casual clothing. The illustrator did this it show the change in the way we dress and to truly separate each image.
If you look closely at the detail of the parents in each image, the first picture shows that their eyebrows are slightly separated, showing an emotion of more disappointment. However, in the other image, the eyebrows are darkly highlighted, showing a true emotion of anger and rage.
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In Daryl Cagle's '1960 vs. 2010' graphic image, he exemplifies a major blame shift in the fifty year period. Cagle maximizes the student's failing grade in both times but highlights the fact that in 1960, the student is receiving the blame for the grade where as to the more recent time, the teacher is receiving the blame. Cagle implies how time has changed how parents hold their children accountable and the reader can infer that as time went on, parents have became less harsh on their kid. Cagle also illustrates the child in 2010 to be mimicking the father, which portrays a shift from the child feeling he/she should respect the elders and that more recently, the child has a touch of overconfidence and that they may do whatever they want.
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In Daryl Cagle's graphic image comparing 1960 to 2010, he presents a transformation in blame. The little boy, who looks terrified, in the left image seems to be mimicking his parents in the right. This accurate image depicted sheds light on the pressure given to teachers in modern times. Parents rely on the teacher to teach their children unlike the past times where the children were in charge of their education. Another indicator of evolved times includes the appearance of the parents. To the right, the view might notice how casual they are dressing compared to the left image. Cagle's indention for the drawling was to open the closed view of how the pressure as shifted from student to teacher.
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In the graphic created by Daryl Cagle to represent how the educational system has shifted, it is blatantly obvious that in 1960 the student was responsible for their grade, but in 2010 it has become the teacher's fault if the student in failing. Cagle alludes to this by switching the parents blaming their child to blowing away the teacher with the force of their blame and anger. The author also depicts the parent's attire in a negative light in 2010 compared to 1960 when they are wearing nicer outfits. This is meant to communicate that as the educational system declined, the seriousness that should be associated with school also decreased and became much more causal. While the graphic is slightly entertaining, it is also disheartening, which the author wanted the audience to understand.
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In Daryl Cagle's graphic timeline, we see the shift of blame from student to teacher for poor grades. The aggressive stance of the parents shock and terrify both the student and the teacher. We see the student in the 2010 side taking the same aggressive stance of his parents, almost mimicking them. The artist did this to show that the student is not actually that bothered by his poor performance. Cagle also shows the teacher looking at the parents and not the students to show how she is not scared of the student.
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Daryl Cagle exhibits through his artwork how the blame of children's grades have drifted from it being the children's fault to it being the teacher's flaw. In both of the illustrations, the parents are hunched over in outrage. In 1960, the parents are furious with their child and resting the blame of a failing grade on their shoulders. In 2010, the parents are accusing the teacher of failing their kid and it appears they have stormed into the teachers classroom and bombarded the teacher with a bunch of allegations. The teacher is blown away in dread and bewilderment at how this kid failing is her fault. It also appears that the kid has picked up on the parents actions which is why he is shouting at the teacher in a robotic way.
Daryl Cagle drew the graphic image portraying the diffrence of who is blamed for students failure in 1960 contrasted to a more modern day representation of 2010. In the first image the child is being put in a negative light and is beign scrutinized by his parents because it is was the understanding of the time period that children were responsible for their own grades. The second image represents a dramatic change in the way that parents conceive and inturpret a negative grade given to a child. The aggressive body language the parents are displaying in the second image is showing hostility towards the teacher and their want to protect their child. The dramatic change between the two images is representative of the change in the way the parents and the school system treats students that have lower grades compared to how the children used to be treated.
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Daryl Cagle shows the true twistedness of our current education system in his graphic image portraying a student receiving an F in 1960 and 2010. In the 1960 side of the graphic art, it shows a student being scorned by his parents for receiving an F on his report card. On the 2010 side of the art it also shows a student who earned an F on his report card; however, in the 2010 side, the anger of his parents is not focused on the student but towards the teacher. It can be inferred that the artist put this in to promote the thought that parents are no longer blaming their children for the "terrible grades" they are presented with, and it is the teacher's duty to assure the child earns a good grade. In conclusion, this graphic shows what our current school system has become, due to effort lacking students.
In Daryl Cagle's image depicting 1960 vs 2010, he shows the shift in blame for getting bad grades on a report card progress from the child to the teacher. He is trying to convey how parents no longer blame their own children, the ones that work for the grade, for failing. the parents now shift their anger towards the teacher for failing their child. the artist depicts modern-day parents as less professionally presentable. in the part of the image showing the 2010 family, the child seems to be impersonating his parents and not taking responsibility for his grades, supporting the authors main argument.
In the graphic drawing by artist Daryl Cagle, he portrays how blame has shifted responsibilities over time between children and teachers in a classroom setting. In the 1960 side of this image the parents are yelling at the student for the terrible grade. This is because kids have total control on what grades they get with the effort that they put into their school work. On the 2010 side the parents are yelling at the teacher for the bad grade. Cagle is saying that society now does not blame kids for their actions but the adults that are watching over them. Children no longer think for themselves but mimic the adults in their life. Morals have changed and the child is never to blame. His drawing delivers the message that kids will never learn to be successful if they do not learn from their mistakes and take responsibility for their choices.
In Daryl Cagle's graphic portraying the shift in responsibility of less-than-stellar grades from the student to the teacher, he contrasts the uniformity of the parents disciplining their child in the 1960's with the new but quite common blaming of the teacher in the 21st century. The shift in accountability in 2010 may be alluding to the possible need the parents feel to compensate for being absent in their child's life, as children were left to their own devices in the mid 2000's more so than the 60's, and are attempting to fight for their child's grade as a form of love, whether they truly understand the issue or not. Unfortunately the child can be seen mimicking the father, and teacher can be seen cowering in fear just as the child was in the 60's, also reflecting the way she could have frequently been treated in a malicious way at other times in her career, just as many others have.
In Daryl Cagle's comic picture "1960 vs. 2010" he outlines an transition in who parents blame for unsatisfactory grades. Parents being depicted yelling at a child who is leaning back to get away and sweat coming off his face implys in 1960 the child would get in trouble. In 2010 with brow furrowed parents immediately rest the blame of unacceptable grades on the teacher. The teacher is blown away by the shock of the parents anger at her due to their child's failing. In fact she is blown away so hard she grips the desk to stay where she is. Children in modern day are unaccepting of blame, instead they look to the next person to set the blame upon their shoulders.
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In Daryl Cagles graphic he compares the substantial change in the societies of 1960 and 2010. He differs the two societies immensely by the way the parents are dressed, the blames shift from the child to the teacher, and the difference of attire between the two images. In both images the student has an F on his report card, but in the second image the blame is on the teacher and not on the student. This author believes that parents nowadays think that it is the teachers job to make the student have a good grade, and if they have a bad grade it is the teachers fault. When it is truly is not the teachers fault it is most likely the students. This image truly shows what education has lead to due to students not working as hard as they used to.
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In the graphic image, Daryl Cagle sheds a light on the way the education system has changed immensely through the way he portrayed the parents of the child receiving the failed grade. It shows that in the 1960s the parents of the terrified child are roaring at him and in the 2010 model the parents are screaming at the teacher for failing the child. This displays the blame shift from the child to the teacher. He also presents how the adults are dressed. In 1960 citizens would dress up versus now in 2010 citizens dress in casual clothes. This parades the idea that the school system has become way too lenient and casual. His message is that the lacking children now a days cannot take blame for themselves and will never succeed in life if they do not learn from their mistakes.
Daryl Long undoubtedly illustrates the alteration between "the blame game" in different centuries. The viewer can beyond shadow of a doubt recognize the sense of discomposure and uneasiness in the child and the teacher who are shed in the same light as "receiving" the bad grade. Contrary to the outfits of the parents on the left side, the right side alludes to a more informal or relaxed ensemble, displaying the lack of care. Along with the overconfidence in the parents that their child's grade is not justified, the child holds the same assurance as his elders, exhibiting the absence of discipline in today's generation.
Daryl Cagle compares parents learning a kid's grade in 1960 vs. 2010. He presents a notable shift in blame from the student to the teacher. In 1960, the grades and education are the responsibility of the student rather than the teacher. Also, in 1960, the parents were dressed presentably daily, but in 2010, the parents wore casual clothes to a supposedly formal meeting.
In the 2010 image, the parents bombarded the teacher rather than scheduling a meeting ahead of time. The teacher was unprepared for the conference and was blown away by the argument.
The parents have an aggressive posture in both pictures, but it is aimed at different people. Finally, the split between the pictures is notable because it is broken because there is a shift in how the parents approach the issue and to signal the shift of responsibility from the kid to the teacher.
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Daryle Cagle's image portrays how society has developed a blame shift between 1960 to 2010; going from the student to the teacher. The parents outfits have become less presentable, helping manifest the idea how parents have became less strict over the years. Not only have parents standards decreased, but students as well.The first image shows the kid emotionally affected from his grade, but then the kid is standing so big and strong, he appears to be blowing the teachers hair back. These changes develop an idea that the accountability held over students has declined immensely.
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