The artist uses normal school events to outline the negative connotations of modern society. In the first image, he shows a student dodging bullets as a class requirement, and probably as a drill. During school, students may have fire, earthquake, or tornado drills. However, this class is having shooting drills to practice how to avoid being killed by a gunman.
The artist also uses specific pops of color throughout his image. In each image he outlines the negative points that are a reality in modern school days. He highlights these spots to make a point in his argument that these activities and thoughts are not okay.
The artist uses the title, "School Daze," to suggest that no one is ever really attending school, but rather a boot camp to train for modern society. He could have chosen to be literal and use "days" instead, but he used "daze" because it describes that it is not how it is supposed to be. He shows that we no longer have time for fun because we are constantly training to stay alive.
- very good thoughts
- vocab could be improved
- try using more phrasing other than "the author" and "he"
Lots of summary
The graphic designer Mcman created this image to showcase how traditional school has changed and been affected by violence. Kids go through school in a 'daze' because they're more worried about their safety in a building that is supposed to be a place of learning AND safety. The exercise in school today is running away from danger, recess is used to be evacuated from the school, and a pep rally is actually a protest about the lack of safety in today's schools. McMan choose to reference the violence that is happening in today's schools by showing how kids today have much bigger worries like fighting for their lives, not just stressing about a big test. The majority of the image isn't in color except for what McMan is trying to make stick out like the bullets and protest signs. By doing these things in color, he helps his main message get across and paid attention to. This image is designed to create more support for stricter gun laws by showing what tragedies can happen when pretty much anyone can have access to a gun.
- small grammatical errors
- phrasing needs work
- good ideas
- nice ending sentence
Madman uses his work to show how the increase in the amount of shootings has caused for school to become a dangerous place instead of a safe place. The school shootings have caused for pep-rallies to change from cheering on the football team to protesting to try and save themselves. He uses this picture to show us how we need to change something about the school system or we are going to keep losing kids and the purpose of school. He also uses different shades of color to point out how we now have to be more focused on the shooting aspect of school then the learning side. He shows it this way so we have more of an emotional outlook on the topic and have our eyes opened to the reality of it.
- good ideas
- more summary than analysis
- lacks depth
vocab/wording needs to be stronger
The artists rendering of a "school daze" shows kids preparing for an attack on their school. The kid in "Phys. Ed." is training to run from and dodge bullets while the kids going to "Recess" are training to evacuate the school. In the "Pep Rally" section are being taught how to stage a protest for after the events happen to raise awareness. This is showed with the bullets, cop, and signs all being the only objects of color in their panels hinting that they are not really there. The over all message that the artist is trying to portray through this is that the children going to school are being prepared for a horrible event that could happen that they should never have to worry about.
- good ideas
- lacks depth/ academic vocab
- last sentenced could be reworded to have more of an affect on reader
The graphic artist puts a depressing touch on the classic school day to bring attention to what has been happening on multiple occasions in today's society. Comparing a school shooting evacuation plan to normal activities in school (dodging a bullet for PE class, evacuating/escaping the school symbolizing 'recess' and a protest symbolizing 'pep rally') to compel the reader into coming out of a "daze" and thinking about what needs to be done to prevent these shootings from continuing and not being a common occasion. Today, school shootings have become a common story on the news which demonstrates why the the artist would choose to compare it to something as average as a normal school day. Children (and parents) fear school (which is demonstrated in the artist's 'pep rally') for that reason, the artist wants eyes on the fact that children should not be scared to go to school.
- good ideas
- last sentence is confusing to read
- great use of descriptive language
on track as an overall analysis, could work on strengthening phrasing
In the artist MadmanD's graphic image titled "School Daze," the artist is trying to portray the true terror many students face today. The artist uses the term daze instead of days to imply that many students remain blinded and unable to focus on the true purpose of school do to the horrific acts that could happen in their schools. MadmanD included images of our current situations in schools where students are in constant terror and uncertain of safety, even in the times most cherished by students. In the last picture it shows the students banding together, pleaing for assistance in some way from the United States. It can be inferred that MadmanD put this last image in the piece to have a lasting affect on the viewer.
7- nailing it until the last sentence
some edits needed, but right on track as analysis
The comic artist, Madman drew an image related to the recent school shootings that have recently ocured. The illustrator gave the hopefulness of school and gave it a spin that makes the image dark and somewhat morbid. He uses color to highlight the key points of his picture to get the message across effectively. The title of the picture uses "daze" instead of "days" to give it a normal tone but with a twist so that when you first look at the title you know there is something unusual and different. He also used the titles of normal times during the school day to give it that dark twist. In the first image, the boy running from the bullets has his head down. This posture give the person a sense of exhaustion like he is tired of living in fear and running in what is supposed to be a safe place.
- very plain language
- lacking depth
- spelling errors
- reword first sentence
vague and weak
wording is too basic
The artist of this image that gets viewers thinking, portrays school environment in a negative connotation. All of the activities that children of the past viewed as joyful, are now viewed as a safety hazard. The children have to be careful when they go outside or do normal activities. The title, "School Daze" explains the photos very precisely. It shows that people in school are just put in a daze now and can't enjoy things like PE, recess, or pep assemblies. The use of color also plays an important role in these scenes. Everything that is negative is in color to shine a light on the fear that the children have to face at school everyday. Society needs to figure out a way to give back the lives of children to where they don't have to live in fear and enjoy school as much as people did when they were their age.
- Don't give title?
- reword first sentence
- lacking analysis depth
- good ideas
very surface analysis
must amp up wording and syntax
The graphic artist of the cartoon "School Daze" manifests customary school activities into horrific situations. The usage of color emphasizes the lack of safety and trust in this generation's school protection. The first picture of a school boy dodging bullets gives quite the negative connotation towards of the security in education, since school is supposed to be a safe learning environment. The students holding hands in the second cartoon box showcases the rise of peer confluence with "RECESS" being used as an evacuation and the kids sticking together. Posters displaying the words "HELP US" and "I DON'T WANT TO BE SHOT" can be misleading to the fact that students aren't being over-dramatic, they're scared and ready for a change.
- good word choice
- small grammar ideas
- great word choice
good analysis, some interesting points made
watch vocab- accuracy
The artist displays parts of a "School Daze" by showing a modified version of phys ed, recess, and a pep rally. The artist displays a sad tone by presenting a situation that happens more often than it should, a student dodging bullets. The artist address that many recesses at school have turned into evacuation drills or actual evacuations by depicting kids lining up out side the school and a man in a orange vest directing them. The pep rally which is the last part of the "School Daze" the artist shows is notifying the person looking at the art piece that pep rallys are no longer for supporting our school and teams, but more for being heard about the dangers of school shooting. this is shown but students holding up posters and signs that read, "I don't want to be shot," "help us'" and "i'm afraid."
- good ideas
- lacking analysis depth
- grammar & spelling errors
must have sentence structure variety
In Madman comic, "School Daze", the reader is able to immediately recognize the uncomfortable twist on traditional everyday school life. Throughout the three consecutive pictures, the use of color is very limited, and the only notable color is used to highlight negative images and emotions, such as fear, pain, and desperation. Using a direct reference to the school shooting protests all around the US and combining them with a stereotypical pep rally, he creates a haunting crossover which is most likely meant to project the idea that "school shouldn't be a place for fear" and the children should not be forced to worry about their lives in a place of what should be security and safety. Madman is ultimately portraying guns in a negative light, which in all honesty, is a wake up call that many self-made ignorant people could put to good use.
- Great analysis/ language
- one grammatical error
- very well organized
nailed it until you interjected your personal opinion
elevated sentence structure
In the shown image above, Madman, the artist, is illustrating modern school days and how they have changed. He uses classes that once were fun and that kids looked forward to, like recess and Phys Ed., and he spins them around to make them have a negative connotation. When viewers think of Phys Ed, they think of dodging dodge balls, not bullets. When they think of recess, many think of running around and playing Hide and Go Seek, not running for your life and hiding from a psychotic killer who has decided to spend the day terrorizing innocent, helpless kids.
This image is mostly black and white, but notice the use of color. The artist uses the color to make the bad things pop out. For example, the bullets leave a red line as they whiz by the students body. Also, at recess, the only color pop there is an officers jacket who is helping kids evacuate who are hugging, crying, and holding hands. Lastly, in the bottom picture, the words "I don't want to be shot up." are in a blood red, and the words "Help Us." and "I am afraid." have a blue and yellow color. The message that the artist is trying to deliver to the audience is how the schools have turned from a safe, happy place for many kids to learn, into a sad, scared place where the kids sit as waiting ducks waiting to be slaughtered.
- very good ideas
- well written
- few grammatical errors
summary, but could easily switch over...ideas are good, style is off
The artist of this graphic shows positive aspects of school and flips it on its head by making the aspects very negative. He describes phys ed ,which is normally the class the some people look forward to in the day, as negative by showing a kid getting his physical activity by running from bullets. When phys ed is not just running from bullets. The artist then shows our recess, the only time kids get to go outside,
as evacuating the school. Then the artist shows pep rallies as a negative aspect of school, when pep rallies are supposed to be a way to get your students hyped for a game or a certain event and to be proud of our school, but the artist shows it in a negative way by showing the pep rallies we have are for protest.
- refrain from using aspects so often
- good thoughts
- grammatical errors
too many errors in sentence structure and proofreading issues
must elevate wording
The artist shows what is supposed to be a traditional school day turned into a sad realization. What should be P.E. now feels like dodging bullets. What should be recess is an evacuation drill. This is to show that there is a need for greater gun control, but also that it is sad that there have to be evacuation drills in the first place. We see the students becoming more alarmed about a potential threat with the pep rally. Instead of celebrating school success, students are expressing concern for school safety. The author shines a very negative light on gun control.
- great wording
- short, choppy sentences
- lacking depth
The graphic artists that designed the image " School Daze" used three provocative and hard- hitting images in order to get an emotional reaction out of the viewer. The labels to the side of the three images are used to show how schools have turned from a place of joy and learning into a place that children must fear for their lives.Color is used to amplify certain parts of the image in order to force the viewer to focus on things that are disturbing to the comfort of the viewer, the bullets swarming around a child , a police officer directing children out of a school , and signs that are clearly a cry for help. The artists is calling for change and trying to make the viewer of the image want to help the artists's cause by causing emotional discomfort.
- good ideas
- several grammatical errors
- well organized
right on- correct style- analysis
The graphic artist, Madman, uses the current phenomenon of school shootings compared to normal school functions like PE, pep rallies, and recess to show .
His use of color shows these school activities are no longer black and white like they used to, and students are suffering from fear because of the color. Instead of supporting a sports team at a pep rally, the students are rallying to stop the shootings in which they have no control over. The physical education has also turned. Students are being taught how to defend themselves. More practice of evacuations as depicted in the second illustration help students know a plan in case something were to happen. The message of this picture is melancholy because students should not have to focus on invaders while they are going about their school tasks.
- good ideas however not communicated well
- part missing?
- good use of flare words such as phenomenon and melancholy
it gets better as you go
needs clear unifying direction, topic sentence
The graphic artist uses this piece of art to show the fear shootings have brought in everyday life. What used to be normal, fun activities are now being portrayed as terrifyingy and emotional times.
With the artists selective use of color, he draws to our attention the emotional affect it is bringing to people. The colorful police officer is standing out, for it reflects the need for an officer at all times and locations. Holding hands which is usually used for comfort, is now being used to escape danger.
The artist is showing how environments are changing caused by fear of safety. The idea that something has to be done to increase safety is presented through this image.
-very choppy sentences
-good ideas... could be communicated better
-spelling errors ex.terrifyngy
a little choppy, not as fluid as it could be
solid attempt at analysis, just needs some TLC edits
The author is using the names of activities in schools to convey the fact that school shootings are becoming more common. In the title "school daze," the author uses the word "daze" instead of "days" to show that school shootings are becoming more and more common, similar to the common daily school activities listed. the image only uses color in the parts that point out school shooting, like the bullets and the police men to better emphasize his point.
Not capitalizing is a major issue, unacceptable at this stage
Amp up wording and phrasing
not a summary, but limited or low level analysis- go deeper
verb choice is ok but amp up all of them