In today's modern world, polite speech is draining away and is starting to become more meaningful than before. Polite speech reveals someones maturity and politeness, but recently people have started to ignore others. In today's twisted world, some people feel obligated to morph themselves into the stereotype that everyone needs to be friends with everyone. 10 years back, a young girl greeted me for the first time and exclaimed, "Hi sweetie, look how big you've gotten!" Laughingly, I realized she only pronounced that to me because she has picked up on it from people around her that have talked to her. Soaking up the people's use of language around leads to more and more people greeting someone and asking 'How are you?' Sadly, less people are saying these things so less kids are picking up on these polite manners which means it's becoming more rare.
- anecdote, while personal and original, does prove your overall point
- not on topic (the prompt more or less asks why does Americans express polite speech more than have times changed)
- some really unique diction "Soaking up" "draining"
When studying the cultures and diverse people, it has been found that polite speech exists due to value of caring even when you don't want to. In the past, on several occasions, people are rude and it ruins others' day. However, politeness, even on your darkest day, will allow for happiness in other peoples. With politeness, other people may live another day, or feel more apt to accomplish their goal they've been working towards. Many people don't know the effect that their kindness, or rudeness, has on another person's life. With this in mind, always be kind. Kindness is as contagious as a yawn or a smile and with one person being more polite, everyone will eventually cut out rudeness in their life. In these students' lives, they have been trained to care, soon we all might just go that extra mile to actually care. Humans are very emotional creatures and we want to care.
- too much repetition of politeness which then transitions to kindness which is also highly repetitive
- second sentence doesn't make sense
- stray away from commanding sentences
- try to amp up the vocab a little more
- you do however convey your opinion well
The value or function of polite speech in a culture or community is very little as it is impersonal and is solely an ingrained manner in many people. The stiffly posed question of "how are you?" doesn't show a large amount of concern but merely a rather awkward attempt at an ice breaker that typically doesn't lead to a lengthy conversation. The effect is still the same if you don't speak at all because the conversation isn't going to lead anywhere and both parties feel uncomfortable. A personal, engaging question like "what new ideas are giving you inspiration today?" will lead to an involved conversation that makes both groups feel as if they were understood or actually cared about. Being polite can come across like you believe you are above the other person or too selfish to genuinely speak to them and quickly kills any worthwhile discussion. If you want to contribute the most value to your community, be willing to give someone your full attention and interact beyond what is expected of you to be considered courteous.
- your first three sentences were phenomenal
- the more you wrote the more it hurt you in the sense you started using the pronoun you and your ideas become more fuzzy structure wise
- the second to last sentence you said polite but I think you intended artificial conversation. Politeness overall doesn't come across as arrogant or above everyone
- solid argument and great intentions
In a study by an anthropologist, he/she concludes that people say friendly phrases to show politeness, rather than literal intent, which questions the value of this politeness. The purpose of this politeness is to keep an average reputation to one person that would then not talk badly about you to someone else. people do not want to be known as rude or someone who is mean for unknown reasons, people want to have a reputation of kindness or politeness.
-merely restates prompt
- does not have depth or meaning
- no example or connections
- weak diction and repetition of politeness
- capitalization error
- does state a stance but does not persuade the audience
These polite phrases have value either when it is just being polite or when it is from a literal intent. When I ask my family and friends how they are doing, or what they've been up to, I mean what I am asking. When I am speaking with random person, I ask just out of politeness than literal intent. I do it out of politeness because some people don't want to tell a random person what's been going on in their life. Saying "how are you" or "nice to meet you" is just me trying to be polite because we live in a society where you can offend anybody, anywhere at any time of the day. There are many reasons to be polite than actually meaning what you say. For example, if you are at a restaurant and the waiter/waitress is rude to you, you are not going to give a big tip, rather if they were good and polite you would. Being polite rather than actually being literal has value in the modern world.
- lacks introduction to "these polite phrases"
- nicely and distinctively separates personal and impersonal
- try to rephrase sentences to not use I
- try to be more creative with diction and not repeat polite or other forms of polite
- great closing sentence try to structure your other sentences like that, clear and concise
In a constantly evolving society, with communication being a driving factor behind evolution it is apparent how important communication, especially polite speech, is. If a person is to speak politely to another being, they are much more likely to get what they desire. For example if a car salesman is trying to sell someone a car and they are very rude in their speaking, a person is most likely going to refuse to buy a car from them. Through the course of history, humans have discovered the extreme advantages someone can gain through the use of polite speech and continuously use these methods to benefit themselves. Without the use of polite speech, many people would have never become as technologically sound as we are today.
- strong diction
- solid argument and flow
- would have given an 8 with a more original example
- could maybe switch a couple of the "polite speech" with a synonym such as "small talk" or "greetings"
People often underestimate the value of polite word choice, simply by talking in a positive tone and using positive words you can largely change someones opinion about you. A modern day example understood by almost everyone is a job interview. The change from " I guess" to the more polite "yes sir" automatically makes you seem more professional and causes the interviewer to raise their opinion of you. The way people speak in changing constantly and adding new slang that may make older generations uncomfortable, because of this using polite language is something that will always have a place in ones vocabulary if they wish to be respected by all types of people.
- could amp diction up more
- repetitive polite and positive
- the last sentence is completely off topic which translates to an inadequate concluding sentence
- the job interview connection is relatable
- clear stance of argument
The intent of polite speech can vary, but anthropologist have found through a study that more then likely polite communication has no literal intent, but even if this approach is true that doesn't mean society should stop being polite. Whether humans use it to make others feel heard or to fill an awkward silence, or maybe we simply use it because those before us have taught society to. For whatever the reason is society has found it is a necessity to use polite speech through out their daily life. As mankind has the need to know others care about them, in order to get this society asks how others are doing, to get the same question in return, even if it has no literal intent.
- break or reword your first sentence (ie. two but's used)
- argument flows extremely well
- good diction
- the argument is very common so to make it unique try to connect an original example
- very clear and concise
In our society, people like to say polite greetings or conversation starters to be polite and not come off as condescending when others think about you as a person. Whenever people are in the supermarket or out in public somewhere and they see someone they know, their mind starts running one hundred miles an hour thinking "oh my gosh do I have to talk to them?" or "what should I say to them?" The first response is "Hey, how are you?" Nobody really cares about how they are feeling in that exact moment. They just don't want to seem rude or stuck up by not interacting with that human. Humans in our society today only care about how other perceive them and if they think they are "polite." Humans care too much about how the world views them so they lie and say things like "Let's get in touch," when in reality nobody would ever want to get in touch with that certain individual.
- sparks of great diction
- original argument on why we make small talk
- repetitive humans -> try society, the country, or community
- try spending more time for your concluding sentence to leave the reader intriged
"Polite speech" is pushed upon people from the moment they are able to talk, making it seem to hold a higher value than it actually does. Examples being that when growing up, if the speech isn't used, punishment is given. In modern society the expectancy of the use of that speech is in everyone and everywhere, and when one doesn't use it the bad impression is created. This bad impression is one that many long to not have, making the function of "polite speech" to make one seem, in simple terms, decent, polite, or trustworthy. Although "polite speech" is rarely a "literal intent," which many have experienced for themselves. Meeting someone for the first time to see that they seem genuine due to their "polite speech," but later finding out they aren't the "polite" person that they first portrayed serves as an example. This type of speech is a selfish object that one uses to make him or herself look better to their audience, making it have a false high value to many people.
- adequately shows common trends among the country
- just because the prompt used polite speech doesn't mean you need to quote it ever time. it will only hurt you because it highlights your repetitiveness of polite speech
- great concluding sentence left the reader satisfied
- you originally show how someone can appear polite and late not be
The excerpt clearly distinguishes the idea that on a daily basis we use polite speech between one another. Even though polite speech seems more often than not meaningless, it's often very important for our relationships.Our daily use of polite speech appears to be very useless but it helps establishes and define our character. Polite speech shows our intent and what/who we care about so without it our daily communication and interactions would be very dull and more than likely misinterpreted.
- first sentence just summarizes
- no connection or example
-last sentence is getting somewhere with the argument and stance try to introduce with that to build, develop, and expand
- clearly state what the pronoun our is referring to (country, world, etc.)
Balancing consistency in relationships, everyday small talk, and pursuing the question of how an acquaintance is "doing" simply out of courtesy is the result of decades of conditioning regarding the desire to maintain a sense of societal and social balance, as well as to avoid conflict. Going to the store, church, or even a workplace proposes a repetitive system of greetings, inquiries about someone's well-being, and even their personal life just to form a connection with their counterpart no matter how small. Human beings feel a need to be included, cared about, and sometimes just to speak for the sake of speaking, therefore catering to these needs by projecting them unto others. The undeniable qualities mentioned are faulted to an extent, but to maintain comfort and keep upset to a minimum, they are necessary.
-solid diction as always
- be careful with the "doing" mrs. j doesn't like it when you quote something what was not in the promompt
- argument flows very well
- would have given an 8 with a more original example or connection
In society today, your first impression and effect on others is the main way others value you. If humans are able to gain the respect and positive vibe from others, then they will be successful. Therefore, polite speech is necessary to make that positive first impression. Polite speech is necessary to gain strangers respect. Polite speech is needed to capture others kindness and support. For example, a politicians worldly view is very important, they need strangers support and side with the very few words they speak. Without polite speech, relationships within the world would lack respect.
- how will the respect and positive vibe lead to success
- I get that the repetition of "polite speech is necessary" adds emphasis and dramatic effect but the reader with get the same thoughts if you combine it into a list of three in complete sentence
- nice political example expand a little more to connect it fully with the topic
- strong argument
The United States along with a couple of other countries have diverted from the rest of the world through the social acceptance of polite speech. Americans communicate with basic small talk to occupy time or create a larger communication network. The rest of the world finds this social interaction to be quit odd; countries such as Germany, rarely speak to others without intention of a meaningful conversation. Personally, being an American citizen, polite speech is highly valuable. Hypothetically, someone who had a melancholy day might appreciate a "How are you?" from a distant friend that would allow the person to express their feelings even if the receiver doesn't actually listen or care. The friendliness of initiating a conversation allows everyone to feel surrounded with support or comfort through words. Polite speech enables our culture to expand their social network.
The reason that people use polite phrases like "Nice to meet you" is that from a very early age it was ingrained into their psyche, by their elders, that when you speak to some one you are supposed to be cordial. This happens two ways, the first way is that parents instruct their children how to speak to strangers and they usually tell the children to treat everyone with respect. The second way is the kids hear how their elders speak and copy it. The reason that elders stress the use of polite language is that they were taught that it causes people to have a higher opinion of the person in question.
- consistent argument
-numerous grammatical errors -> either you don't need the comma "their psyche by their parents" or you use it instead of starting a new sentence, adding a conjunction, or a semicolon "This happens two ways, the first way"
-sparks of great diction overall not very sophisticated
- how does the polite speech affect our community?
Polite speech has been used for centuries all over the world. It originally was intended as a friendly interaction to socialize but now has developed into a polite obligation, showing that they care about a person to a need for courteous gesture. For instance, I have gone to many different activities and gotten potential friends phone number and information to extend our friendship into the future. However, usually we end up never speaking again, keeping each others numbers in our phones and putting them to the bottom of the friends list. It has now become a social obligation to want to get to know people, even if your interest doesn't match up because a person fears the thought of being rude, uninterested, or inconsiderate just for the unattatchment to a new person.
- solid diction
- great argument
- example seems forced and takes away from your stance
- great concluding sentence
There is a value to polite speech in society today because with out it all communication would either be negative or there wouldn't be any. Polite speech keeps people on good terms with one another even though what they may be saying is false. When people grow older they become less fond of one another so when they happen to meet again they say polite things and go on about their day; for example, high school friends might see each other in their thirty's. They say "Hey how are you? We should catch up sometime," even though there is mutual knowing that it is more than less likely to actually happen. It is what individuals categorize as being a nice person that society pushes as high morals.
- when you go back and edit your paragraph if something seems unclear try to add adjectives for volume and depth. for example the first sentence could logically flow to "In society today, if the highly valuable polite speech would seize to exist, all communication would be negative or nonexistentially silenced."
- although ideas are there, lacks sophisticated diction
- try focusing on the flow and transition from sentence to sentence
- strong concluding sentence
In a constantly changing society, humanity feels the urge to be accepted by everyone. Polite phrases given by the anthropologist like "How are you?" or "Nice to meet you," are just simply ways to come across as charismatic and friendly, gaining the trust and decency of the recipient of the polite gesture by putting a mask of graciousness. People who live in rural areas tend to be more friendly, as there are less people to interact with and more need to gain respect. New Yorkers and people that live in huge, booming cities on the other hand feel less of a compulsion to create bonds or affection with acquaintances or freshly met people. The general idea of literary intent in the category of common questions and phrases is put on a pedestal because no one wants to admit that they don't actually care about the answer, so in defense, society places a typically more welcoming side into their personality to listen to the response of the commonly used remark.
- solid diction
- original connections
- the argument flows
- second sentences needs editing/restructuring sounds like the anthropologist created these phrases for us to use instead on analyzing America's common trends
Telling someone that its "nice to meet you" or asking "how are you?" are common phrases that are regarded as polite manners. Usually people would ask these things to get to know someone or to make them feel welcome; however, these polite phrases are becoming so common, that some people feel the need to say them, but do not care what the response is. Similarly, many employers ask their workers to make small talk with customers to make them feel welcome, so they use polite speech because while a seemingly nice gesture, many of them do not feel the need to know the answer to the question asked. These phrases have evolved from a way of getting to know someone, to a polite way of acknowledging someone without actually having a meaningful conversation. By shifting the function of polite speech this way, people are able to give empty, yet kind gestures.
- you have the strongest transitions from one sentence to the next out of the whole class
- too generalized in vocabulary like someone, some people, these things, and usually
- sparks of strong diction
- strong closing sentence
- overall the argument is common but lacks depth