In Oscar Wilde's observation, he elaborates on the "virtue" of "disobedience." In history, there have been many times America and its citizens have rebelled for some cause. For example, the Boston Tea Party was a major act of rebellion when Boston citizens snuck onto the ship importing tea to dump several tons of highly taxed tea into the harbor. Britain was using taxes on their exports as a technique for controlling the immigrants. However, the citizens were exhausted of peasantry. They wanted to do things their own way and allow for their own ideas within their own government.Their act of disobedience was majorly effective in gaining the independence of America.
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Disobedience is the the main way that men have been able to change the course of history. From a group of misfit countrymen fighting against a superpower of the world to start a country , to a brave black man risking his job to express the issue his race is fighting through, disobedience is the at the root of change. Wilde's claim that " disobedience is a valuable human trait and supports social progress" is proven by current events. Collin Kapernick took a knee during the national anthem before a game he was supposed to play in , this led to his ethos being used by Nike for advertisement saying "fight for what you believe in , even if it cost everything". Kapernicks situation is a direct example of how disobedience can be a great thing , and lead to change.
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As Oscar Wilde once said, "disobedience...is man's virtue," humans continue to push the limits of society and laws to thrive for change. This was displayed in stadiums across America starting with Colin Kaepernick as he took a knee during the national anthem to protest for police brutality against African Americans. This became an image of disobedience considering the protest was at Kaepernick's work place and the action of kneeling was discouraged. The NFL fired Kaepernick due to his protests showing disobedience is not always a valuable human trait seeing as there can be a multitude of consequences. Disobedience is used as a force for change, but the repercussions or peoples actions can be tremendous.
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Oscar Wilde, an Irish author, claims that disobedience is "mans original virtue," which is a valid argument considering that the United states exists because of disobedience. It has happened time and again that disobedience sparks change, for example: the American revolution, the American civil war, and the civil rights movement, an act of civil disobedience. Today we are seeing large amounts of disobedience regarding the national anthem and the pledge of allegiance. And while little change has happened yet it can be assumed that more social change is soon to come.
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Oscar Wilde's claim about disobedience being a "valuable human trait" is a very valid claim, and there are many historical and modern examples that prove this. The United States wouldn't be where it is today if it weren't for some people deciding to disobey the law, or to not follow the common morals of a society,etc. For example the Revolutionary War all started from the colonists not wanting to follow Britain's rule anymore. They fought for their freedom and they are the reason why the United States has been a free nation for over 200 years. Martin Luther King and the civil rights movement is another historical example of disobedience being a "valuable human trait." If it weren't for the courage of MLK and others to go against segregation during the civil rights movement, the United States would be immensely different than it is in modern times. Schools would still be segregated, buses would still be segregated, restaurants would still be segregated,etc. The United States would not be the glorious country we are portrayed as today without disobedience.
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Oscar Wilde's claim that disobedience is a "valuable human trait" that "promotes social progress," is completely wrong. In today's society many people are continuously disobeying the law and even their workplaces. For instance, many protesters disobey common laws in order to spread their word. These acts of civil disobedience do nothing but halt social progress due to the extreme differences of opinion different minded people have. Another example in current times is Colin Kaepernick kneeling during the United States' national anthem, disrespecting the flag, and the NFL's reputation. Although the trait of disobedience causes extreme social unrest in some situations, there are certain cases where disobedience can be useful. Due to the extreme social unrest and the backtracking of social progress disobedience causes, Wilde's claims are no longer relevant.
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Oscar Wilde conveyed disobedience is a "valuable human trait" and progresses society which in fact is particularly inaccurate. Disobedience does progress society; for example, during World War II Hitler along with the Nazis believed white supremacy, therefore he killed millions of Jews. This idea of white supremacy opened the eyes to the rest of the world to expose a wrong doing. Society has then evolved to be more accepting such as the LGBQ community and may others with the morals these group express even if it doesn't comply with the general population's morals. Disobedience is not however a "valuable human trait"; religion, for example, shines away from disobedience because of the evil it presents. Jesus did not disobey anyone and he still developed and influence his period greatly.
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Oscar Wild's daring claim along the lines that disobedience is one of the key factors for social progression reveals a valid claim that disobedience is a part of life. Disobedience is caused by people who question their current lifestyle, causing a feeling of dissatisfaction and drive for a positive change. For instance, the Civil Rights Movement was sparked by disobedient people who where dissatisfied about the fairness of living styles and spoke out for change. This may have caused many violent interactions and controversial arguments, but in the end, it gave the minorities more rights and an increase in much-needed equality in a world full of separation, hate, and dissatisfaction.
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Irish author Oscar Wilde's loaded viewpoint that "disobedience is a valuable human trait" can politically and socially be correct and incorrect. Politically, the way Martin Luther King Jr and everyone in the civil right movement stood up to the discriminatory people advanced America forward for the better. Without all the protests and eating at lunch counters where they didn't belong, America would still be the disgusting country who are against African Americans. Then again, other viewpoints that are fought against will never advance our country like the way the civil rights movement did. The KKK, that has been around for generations, fought against and killed members of the other race. They thought that if they disobeyed the laws, this will spark a change and African Americans will be outlawed. "Social progress" happens when the viewpoints are valid. If citizens act out for the wrong reasons, it will never progress our country for the better.
Disobedience, independence, and individuality are all tied together hand in hand and very rarely let go, as observed by renowned Irish author Oscar Wilde. Merely in the past 2 years, an abundance of trends appeared as an effort to reform the ongoing struggle with gun violence, murder of minorities, and plain mistreatment of human beings. Without disobedience, the school walkouts that united students all around the country protesting gun violence would not have occurred and reached the influential level they did. Without disobedience, the voices and shouts of families, friends, and victims themselves who have been agonized by a skewed enforcement of the law, or police brutality, would never be heard from again. And without disobedience, the people who believe in the nation they know and love that have been evicted from their liberties, as well as their home, would never receive even an ounce of justice from the authoritarian figures that lie in the back of their minds at all hours. As Oscar Wilde believed, disobedience is the core influence in societal and social change, which if nothing else, is the only constant.
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Supposed disobedience in history is the reason many Americans thank their ancestors today. Some of the main topics in your history class, speeches we listen to decades later, and public figures are all a stem from one main virtue: disobedience. Without Harriet Tubman defying the rules of slavery or Martin Luther King Jr. leading large crowds of people along streets peacefully, who knows where society might stand in our modern culture. These huge public figures created the path of equality that we follow today and normalized the act of disobedience when supporting the right morals. Although people like Adolf Hitler killing millions of Jewish people and disregarding the positive morality of humanity puts a bad rep on the word "rebellion", the world must realize that without rebellion, the right thing might never be accomplished.
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The quote from Oscar Wilde touches upon man's most defining quality, free will and the ability to disobey and go against the grain in order to achieve social progress. Without the disobedience demonstrated by the brave patriots in the American Revolution, the U.S. wouldn't even exist today. As stated by Wilde, "progress has been made" only through "disobedience and rebellion" which spurred a new era of choice. Society can always be improved and modified to best benefit its members, so defiance will always have a role in civilization. Instead of associating insubordination with an unwillingness to obey authority, affiliate the action with a betterment of the community.
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In 1891 Oscar Wilde discovered that disobedience is engraved in mankind and is "a valuable human trait." This proves true because disobedience is chiseled in America's upbringing and that it is "man's original virtue." Back in the 1700's, pilgrims traveled to the 'New World.' When they arrived, King George III taxed the newcomers, but when the voyagers finally had enough they disobeyed King George III and stopped paying taxes which lead into the American Revolution. By disobeying the King, Americans broke free from England's tight, suffocating grip. Without the disobedience who knows where America would be today. This country was built off of disobedience, and progress can only be made when someone strong and bold sticks up for their own rights and disobeys the controlling leaders.
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Wilde's claim that disobedience is a valuable trait for social progression is to an extent correct if it is kept civilized. Civil disobedience is and was needed throughout history for certain citizens, of different ethnicity, to evolve and become apart of today's society. If no individual had the disobedience trait back in the 1950's and later, blacks would not have had such and evolution. For example, Harriet Tubman was disobedient when she led all slaves through the tunnel to free them. This helped start a revolution that went of for centuries that ended in freedom.
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Disobedience as Oscar Wilde would say is "man's original virtue." This is evident when you look at historic events like the Revolutionary War when a group of patriots stood up and disobeyed the tyrannical government of Great Britain, it was only through this rebellion and disobedience that they were able to incite change. The only way to create change or progress in your community you have to be disobedient.
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Author Oscar Wilde's past observation brought the belief of disobedience, "man's virtue." Disobedience, despite it's negative connotation, stands as a positive move for some people, examples being Wilde's claim that disobedience is the reason for "progress" and for others it is the one way to be original. This virtue is obvious in our society and can be seen almost everywhere, the NFL's current event of players kneeling during the anthem being a well known example of disobedience in society but it attracts attention to the problem it stands for, promoting the change to fix it. On the other hand, disobedience causes trouble, is it really a virtue if all it does is create problems? Wilde proves a point historically and today. for all change begins by an act of disobedience.
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Oscar Wilde exposes the unfortunate reality that disobedience is a needed trait for social growth. While some may claim that disobedience is a very negative act, disobedience is needed to some extent to promote needed change. For instance, Rosa Parks disobeyed the laws to stand up for being mistreated, which resulted in the movement to social equality. Even in modern times this disobedience is present, take into account Collin Kapernick kneeling for the National Anthem. This act caused an uproar within society, urging people to make a statement to achieve their goals.
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