Society as a whole should have a large responsibility when it comes to our soldiers who return scarred from battle. One of the responsibilities would be to help the soldiers return to normal life outside of all the violence and paranoia they had been used too. People should also try to be open with them and become outlets where the ex soldiers can talk and describe their experience. It would also feel good to the soldiers to be praised every once and a while so that they do not feel as if the horrors they experienced where for nothing. Overall society should do its very best to welcome these men and women back home and thank them for their service and try to help them in anyway they can.
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Being scarred can come physically or mentally. On the physical aspect of it, they should be provided with the care needed to put them back in optimal shape and after that they should be looked up to and treated nicely by their fellow citizens. On the mental side of things, they show be assess their mental state. After being assessed they should be treated whether its by taking medicine or by a service. No matter how they are scarred they should be treated like heroes because they quite literally are heroes of the U.S..
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Society has the responsibility of taking care of returning soldiers who have PTSD. As of 2009, over 18% of all active duty military have reported symptoms of PTSD. These symptoms range from depression, alcoholism, drug abuse, and in some cases shell shock. As a country, the US should set up mental health clinics for active returning veterans. These clinics should be government funded which include mental health counselors, medical staff, and a rehabilitation center for drug and alcohol abuse. Soldiers risk their lives every day and the least we could do is provide free mental screening for returning troops. Hopefully, better healthcare and mental screening will help combat and lower the number of troops who experience PTSD.
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When a soldier returns from war society must acknowledge these soldiers have seen and done unimaginable things. They must "combat betrayal of 'what is right' this means a soldier must go against his moral beliefs in order to maintain freedom in his country. Unfortunately these immoral acts haunt the minds of returning soldiers. Flashbacks of "the lifeless body of a 9-year-old girl" and worse flood their minds causing PTSD. Due to this society should be cautious at times knowing their minds can play tricks on them, but they should also help soldiers get the resources they need to deal with such a trauma.
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Our job as a society is to make sure that the brave soldiers that serve our country are took care of and respected. They have seen things that most people will never see. The amount of courage it takes to be a soldier is insane. PTSD is one of the worst things in this world and is a huge problem. We need to help all of the soldiers that have PTSD and help them overcome that mental problem. We need to understand and respect all veterans because they are the reason we have freedom and do the things we do everyday. They protect us from danger and deserve the best from society.
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The responsibility that our society has to our soldiers who come back from war scared is to understand them and what they are going through. Society needs to not shut them down but listen and realize this is a disorder in the mind that they are struggling with. These men and women fought for our country but while doing so, they have be mentally impaired in some way. We care for these people and they might not feel so alone.
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As of 2001, up to 18% of current active soldiers are suffering from PTSD. This is very life altering and terrible for the soldiers. After all of the things the military does for us, we as a society should help them as they come back scarred from war. I think society should have the responsibility of helping the soldiers with whatever they need. They deserve to have a normal life coming home from battle. Also, I feel as a society we don't give enough credit towards the military and all they have done for our country. We should honor and respect veterans everyday and not just on Veterans Day. Citizens really owe it to all veterans, so we need to be more thankful because who knows where we would be without them.
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Society as a whole has a responsibility to be able to recognize brave soldiers who have been diagnosed with PTSD after returning from battle. Being able to comfort them and care for them would make their lives better in ways you can't even fathom. For returning soldiers, they may have experienced life altering events that have been blueprinted into their memories forever and being able to forget or relieve those stressors could make or break their world as you know it. Those soldiers decided to fight for you so in return, we should give the favor back and fight for them and their well being by providing proper way of diagnosing PTSD and effective ways to treat ones suffering with it.
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Our society had a great responsibility to the soldiers who return scarred from battle. They are all great veterans, who have fought for this country and sacrificed more then anyone could imagine. The article states that most soldiers are haunted from the traumatic events they witness while in combat. The soldiers need our help. They need to be provided access to any hospitals or mental health facilities that they need to be able to live the rest of their life to the fullest potential.
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The responsibility our country has for soldiers scarred is the care and effort to let them cope or live a normal life. The government should provide assistance to injured veterans as they gave themselves for the country and deserve something back even if that something is as small as help with rehabilitation. No one person should ever have to come back from war injured without help, expected to get a job and be independent. Many of these veterans can not function due to missing limbs or even mental conditions from scarring moments during their time served. Many of these veterans end up homeless or in extreme poverty due to their injuries and are often never looked after by the government. We as a nation need to support these heroes as they have protected and served us.
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Considering soldiers risk their lives for United States, society should accommodate to soldiers who have been scarred in battle. After fighting in battles, soldiers who have PTSD may be triggered by loud sounds, such as fireworks. Therefore, there should be a sanctuary built that allows little to no sound so the soldiers can go there on holidays that involve fireworks. Next, the topic of what they endured in battle should not be brought up, unless they choose to speak about it. After returning, the scarred soldiers could possibly become distraught due to the trauma they faced.
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It's our responsibility as a society to support those who have served and those who are still serving. Those who sign up to protect our country need to know that they will be supported and cared for if they come back from war with physical injury or PTSD. By providing care for those who return others will not be as reluctant to join.
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As a society, we owe it to our scarred soldiers to offer help in any way we can. These men and women risk their physical and mental health to keep us safe everyday. We should be able to offer low-cost or free therapy so our soldiers can come back home and lead a normal, civilian life. WIthout the extra help, some may never be able to receive an everyday job, leading to more homelessness in our world. This problem could quickly be relieved with easily attainable counseling and medications.
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The United States population should take full responsibility of rehabilitating and carrying for returning soldiers, specifically the government in partner with health care. The United States military by far has one of the largest budgets worldwide. So health care for veterans should be required post war, and it is. However, the VA does little to support PTSD specifically as it is a difficult mental disorder to treat. Most people know a soldier who came back from war and have mental scars, so the disorder is very common and relevant. Treatment is the government's responsibility, as the people who sends citizens out to sea, to treat these soldiers to be able to function in the society as the citizen did before they left. If the government improved VA treatment for PTSD, more citizens might be willing to serve for the United States military.
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Soldiers fight to defend our country everyday and with this comes many repercussions. A significant amount come home scarred or injured creating a lasting effect on them as a person. these people have seen things that are unimaginable. Soldiers that are fighting for us deserve to be treated as if they did something of importance. Society should take care of their veterans. Doctors could do more studies to see how they can improve the veterans life. If the current rotation of soldiers is becoming a smaller time frame then it should be lowered more to be safe to reduce the chance of problems in the future. upon arrival home those with PTSD should receive all the resources possible. It is our job to insure soldiers that come home scarred get the best care available because they took care of us.
The responsibilty our society has to scarred veterans is that we need to do the more for them than we do for just the average citizen. We need to start giving them the upmost form of respect possible. Most of them usually come back with some form of PTSD and can't really afford to go to see a therapist about it so, they just make themselves live with it and sometimes, they can't live with it. We need to make healthcare and living more affordable for them because, they usually come back with nothing or very close to it and so they can end up homeless with no where to go or to turn to. It's not right for someone that had fought and risked their lives for us to be living on the street that someone else just walks and litters on.
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Society has a responsability to aid the soldiers that come home from battle. From as early as the War for Independence against Britian, people returing from battles have been plagued with PTSD. As a society, the ones that the battles are being fought for, we should look for ways to help the ones that have been in distressed due to PTSD. One way that the society could help these people is to set up insitutions that could study the afflicted and develope a humane solution to the problem. Although the number of patients to have this dissorder has decreased 10 fold since the first record, the number is something that could be eliminated completly. Another way that society could take responibility for the scarred is to offer them special jobs or opportunities to support themselfs independent from governmental aid. To help the vets support themselves would be a step in the right direction.
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Some might believe that the hardest part regarding being a soldier is being in battle and serving time. However, many soldiers have to carry their fears from war back home with them, serving in the military can leave physical and mental scars. Post-traumatic stress disorder, or PTSD, affects 20% of soldiers returning home from duty. PTSD can become deadly for some soldiers because they are forced to suffer through it by themselves. As a society we owe it to the people who risked their lives for us, to help them with their everyday struggles due to PTSD. We can help scarred soldiers overcome PTSD by offering resources to help them cope with society. Some examples of resources that are available to soldiers are support groups, medication, and support animals. As a society, we need to make these resources more prevalent to the soldiers suffering n our community.
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Soldiers chose to go out and fight for their country so the least society could do is take care of the after math. Being that soldiers leave for such long periods of time, those who are able to return may not have families waiting for their arrival. Undergoing so much stress and disaster that happens in battle, soldiers possibly can not live normally within society again. For those who have no family to support them society should definitely be responsible for offering the mental help required to live a functioning life after war. The community should also supply jobs and homes so veterans aren't sleeping on streets and under highways. Protecting the soldiers mental health while contributing jobs and home keeps all of society safe from harm.
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Society owes a major debt to our veterans that return scarred from battle. For generations society has ignored their responsibilities to veterans leaving them without resources to housing, food, and even medical help- being physical and mental. Many veterans come back from war facing the physical and emotional scars of battle, but are not treated for them. As a society we can only be held responsible for so much of this lack of assistance for our veterans, until the responsibility is passed on to our government. Not only has society not been open to taking initiative to assist war veterans, but our government lacks the health and housing programs needed to get returning war veterans the care they need.
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The responsibility that we as a society has to our soldiers that return home scared and possibly have PTSD is very large. We as Americans should honor the fact that these soldiers went out and fought for us so we could to continue to live the same. Society should welcome these hero’s home with opening arms and help them as much as we can get through the new battle they are dealt with. I believe that they should have complete and free medical attention when they need it. Overall these soldiers should come home knowing that they will be taken care of all the way.
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