Celebrities lives are the same as any other human life. They don't need special protection or laws because they're a little more well-known then some of us. I do believe that a privacy law should be out into place for the benefit of others. An example of this is the most recent story of Demi Lovato. The media being a constant pest towards her personal health and privacy is unacceptable. They us stuff like this as entertainment for fans of their new source. Something like this needs to be contained and taken care of not pestered and show boated to the entire nation. If you're finding peoples illnesses and disabilities to be your entertainment. Maybe ask yourself, "Am I the problem?"
3- few grammar errors but overall it's a good response and gets to the point
a few grammar errors, but got straight to the point.
Celebrities personal lives are going to be exploited in this day and age. But going so far as to sneaking into someones property to learn something new about them just so you can get something to show or talk about. People are always looking to find flawed celebrities to talk about, but people never realize that just because they're famous, doesn't mean they're perfect and that what is said about them doesn't affect them in a negative way. an overwhelming majority of celebrities have some kind of mental illness whether it be depression, OCD, or any of the other various illnesses. People with these problems do not need to take hearing about the horrible person they are from the whole world, so why should people be able to exploit them.
4- very strong vocabulary, very few grammar errors, and I like the way your response flows.
grammar errors, but good examples with strong vocab.
In a celebrity's life it is hard to find privacy in everyday life. A celebrity signed up for this life, these are the consequences. They should have the protection of a normal civilian involving their property and personal problems involving medical issues but in the outside world, privacy is hard to find. Celebrity's are seen as "newsworthy" objects. In the article it talks about being respectful when it comes to the health of a person instead of blowing it out of proportion. In today's world opinions are being thrown around regardless of what is going on and who is involved. No matter the issue, negative and disrespectful things will come up. In the end, a celebrity's privacy is slim and even with a hard issue in their life, everyone will find out but good and bad can follow it. Celebrity's should have the same normal laws and protection we do but some privacy things were given to them when they signed up for the job.
5- good structure, I like how you supported your answer in her response.
no grammar issues, supported answer, great vocab.
Celebrities private lives should have protection over their mental health. Celebrities should have an option to either tell people about what they have been through or what they are going through or to not tell them. In the article it talks about how when celebrities turn destructive or go down a dark path that they are chided for not taking better care of themselves, yet celebrities already go through enough and shouldn't have to be scrutinized for what they are going through. In conclusion, it is not right for the mental health of celebrities to be released to the public.
5- I like how it gets to the point and uses strong vocab.
5- good structure, great vocab, got straight to the point.
Celebrities today should have the protection and right to decide which part of their lives they want to let the world know. Taking a celebrities life and publishing about there mental illness or just anything can do a lot to them. The article states that they publish these stories because they make us feel better about our self and that should not be okay. Celebrities should have the protection to live there life how they want and if something gets published that they did not want out to the world then it should be automatically took and the reporter should be fired because they have a right to have whats published about their life and should know they have the protection and safety of their own reputation. Celebrities day in day out deal with journalist wanting be the next one to break the big news. Celebrities should have the protection from going one place to another and not have to worry about the journalist around them reporting and recording every little thing to make the next big story. Celebrities are people and want to live there life just like we do.
3- grammar errors, better on transition words, but overall answers the question.
3- answers the question good, maybe find different transition words, few grammar errors.
Celebrities, their families, and personal lives should not be put in the public eye. When it comes to personal family matters, children, or health concerns they should not be in the media, in magazines, or the news. If it were about regular people, they would not have their life made into a show for everone. Just because the people are well know does not mean that they do not having personal lives. One concern about all of their health issues being put out there is that negative comments may be harmful to their mental state. Along with that, there is a HIPPA law to protect the health information of people. When in comes to the protections of celebrities, they should be treated like regular people who have normal lives They should have the choice to make certain things public or contact media companies if they want to be put out there in this way.
5- good examples and great structure
5- great structure, the question is answered with good supporting evidence
Celebrities are human being just like the people of Evansville Indiana. Although they have a special quality or talent that gets blasted all over social media such as singing or telling jokes, does not mean that the ordinary aspects of their life should be posted. Anything from a mental illness to a child being born or even a day out with friends should not be posted. Most people know when and how to get noticed. It is the media that chase them down for the worst reasons. If it were you or someone you cared about, you would not want very personal qualities to be known across the country. Alptraum states that if it must be posted it needs to be posted in a respectful or thoughtful manor and should not actively harm the subject. This could be an option but it would much be easier if it was just left alone entirely. Celebrity lives aren't as fascinating as media tries to make them out to be and american people should respect that.
jumps around a lot, answers the question but some stuff could be taken it to have a more clear answer.
3- jumps around a lot, it answers the question but I feel has extra stuff that could be taken out.
I believe that there does need to be some kind of protection for the personal lives of celebrities. The way the media exploits these people is actually hurting them. One of the main sections in the article is about how the stereotypes of a mental illness has given the media some bad things to say to hurt them. The celebrities should have an option if they want to let the public know about their personal lives. Then if media leaks it they should find who did it and have a consequence for it. Therefore, there does need to be something there to protect the people.
restates question, gets to the point with evidence to back up answer, great structure.
5- answers the question, flows nicely, has supporting evidence
Protections that celebrities should have with their private lives should be very strong because whatever happens in their life is what they need to worry about and not other people. As the article states "we love to turn celebrities darkest moments into entertainment." If it was most people and something happened in their live, they won't want people knowing about it because they might be laughed at or bother when they didn't want to be. So why do we do this to celebrities? Only because people know that they are living there live to the fullest and making money people would dream of making, so anytime people find out something dark, they will use it to ruin their lives.
4- run on sentence, but great textual evidence to support your answer.
4- run on sentence, great textual evidence and answers the prompt very well
The protection should be the kids and personal lives. The children did not sign up for that lifestyle, and are usually not old enough to defend themselves or even understand what is going on. Although protection should be for the kids, but if someone catches someone like Beyonce beating her children then they should put that out. The same goes for their lives, because if someone catches them having an affair or cheating on their significant other, then why would you with hold that information because of the legal issues it opposes. If they don't want that news getting out then they shouldn't take part in any those illegal activities. I understand that they put those stories out for entertainment but if they were moral then they would do it for what is right, but if they do put it out for entertainment then you have to pick past the entertainment part and get to the core issue of the story.
5- really great structure and great real life examples, love the different point of view.
5- Great sentence structure, I really like how you used a different real life example that's not from the article
The protections of the private lives of celebrities should be based off of a contract where the celebrity would have to sign. The contract would be every detailed and descriptive when saying all of the topics the media would be doing when it comes to personal business and any business at all regarding the celebrity. The celebrity would not be pressured at all weather they wanted to sign the contract or not. The contract could also have a page where the celebrity says what the media / press or any kind of source informed to the public, could only be the things he or she signs off for. Celebrities should be able to have a say so when it comes to the privacy of their lives and anyone who didn't follow what the contract says could be dealt with in court.
Celebrities should have some protection of their private life; however, they knew what they were signing up for. Celebrities gained fame from being actors or business people or other occupations. They knew the fame and money that came with these jobs. According to the article, some people believe that celebrities kids should not be photographed or put in the spotlight. However, some celebrities, such as Kylie Jenner, were born into the fame and have thrived because of it. Mental health is also an issue. Many celebrities' mental health is out for the world to see in magazines and on the internet. This is a sensitive topic for many people and i believe that is where the boundary should be.
3- grammar issues but gets to the point and answers the question.
3- few grammar issues, answers the question and gets to the point
Celebrities should have the same privacy as any other person. However, when that privacy is violated they have to ask themselves why is it only them that have privacy issues. They have the problems due to their job. It's called the life of a celebrity. Celebrities make their money by being the center of attention and on the forefront of everybody's mind. This fascination people have with celebrities lead to being interested in what their whole day is like. Yes, celebrities are entitled to the same privacy as everybody else, but it's not fair for them to be the center of attention when they want to be and not when they want to be. In contrast with what celebrities think, the world doesn't revolve around them. The article states that it's not fair for Demi Lovato to be judged because of her mental illness. Her mental illness isn't any more special than somebody else's mental illness. The only reason her mental illness is so widely talked about is because she is constantly the center of attention due to her own choices to become a celebrity. She doesn't get to choose when she becomes the center of attention. That's not how it works.
5- good structure, great vocab, loved how easy it was to read and the examples you used from the text.
5- flows nicely, I really like how the textual evidence is given from the article and then your opinion is tied into that
Having millions of followers on social media is just another part of a many celebrities' lives. With this popularity, comes great privacy risks. There are many opportunities for journalists and news outlets to slander a celebrity's name if they were to commit a negative act or "go rogue." However, there are limits to which mass media should be able to gossip about. The article by Lux Alptraum gives great examples of celebrities who've received backlash for their actions. Domains such as mental health and addiction should not be taken lightly by the public. Slander and libel of a celebrity who has no control over their situation should not be tolerated by the government. Negative press over the celebrity's personal issues should be punishable, whether it be prosecution by the celebrity's management or fines.
5 - very good structure and transition words with awesome vocab.
5- great vocab and use of transitional word, I also like the how your nicely your response flows together
There should be more protections that keep the private lives of celebrities in today's world. Celebrities live a life that everything is exposed. They are not treated the same as everyone else and that is not right. It should be their choice as to whether they want to be bombarded by paparazzi and reporters. They have the same rights as everyone else. Very little detail of your life is made public knowledge. The ability to go to the store or out to eat with your family is almost taken away from you because of all the people that would swarm you. If the celebrity loves all the attention and fans then let it happen, but if they don't there has to be boundaries such as laws for stalking and illegal picture taking. If the celebrity wants to press charges against anyone who presses charges they should be allowed to. Celebrities are no different then us on the inside so they should be treated as equals.
5- really gets the point with great points to back up your answer, easy to read.
5- easy to read, gets to the point and has a good sentence structure
I believe that the private lives of celebrities should have some protections. I think that there should be a law saying that you can't photograph them inside or near their home. I believe that they should be allowed to take down certain things that they deem to personal from any magazine, social media post, etc within legitimate reason. On the other hand they knew that they would get paparazzi and that most people want to know more about their lives when they decided to become famous. They can take certain actions on their own already to prevent certain things from being leaked out to the public. I believe that celebrities today don't have enough protection and should be given more to help them stay private.
5- I like how both different view points are shown in you response, answers the question and has good sentence structure
5- I like how you did both point of views and how easy your wording is to read. very good over all with answer the question.
Celebrities lives are constantly put out in the public's eye. While many people are very intrigued on hearing the next thing about their favortie celebrity, often times we never think how they feel. Every aspect of a celebrity's life is blown up on social media due to paparzzo. Sometimes this can be good for them, but there are also backlashes with this. Celebrities are regular people and they deserve the same amount of privacy as everyone else. For instance, Demi Lovato's apparent drug overdose broke the news a few months ago. The media coverage exposing her for this has caused news articles to provide misunderstanding and misinformation about her mental illness. Spreading the news about her mental illness could have a very negative affect on her life and her road to recovery. Her story should not be put out for everyone to read about. Media coverage like this should not be allowed and celebrities deserve to have more privacy than they are given.
4- good structure, answers the question, has supporting textual evidence. I think it's a little wordy maybe could take out some information to make it easier to read
5- supported your answer with great structure and good transitioning words.
Some protection that celebrities should have in today's world are different considering there are many different types of privacy matters. When it comes to the topic of mental health, there should be a line that people can't cross. A person with a mental illness are very clearly not healthy and they feel they aren't good enough or that they aren't worthy of things, posting their private matters would only make it worse. There is a stereotype for mental illness, that they're unfixable, untrustworthy, and that they're broken. With this being a stereotype it causes people to bash mental illnesses and say it's the persons own fault for not taking care of themselves, but those people who say these things also turn around and say they hope the person suffering can get better. The people who feel the need to talk about another person problems only make it worse. A celebrities private matters should be kept private.
5- sentences flows nicely, good vocab, easy to read and comprehend
5- paragraph flows nicely with good vocab and great different point of view about which types of privacy.
Protection of celebrities lives should be taken more serious. Celebrities should be treated like any other human being. Through the years there has been many cases of emotional and physical harm that have been done to celebrities. Lux Alptraum explains how celebrities may have an illness that they don't want to make known to the public. Celebrities have their right to privacy as their illness can trigger some problems. The protection of celebrities needs to be taken more serious so that the media doesn't share all of their privacy.
5- short, gets to the point and answers the prompt
5- short, answers the question and gets to the point with evidence and great vocab .
Many celebrities become famous through the entertainment business, but their personal lives are apart of a private business. Everyone has a life at home away from work, but celebrities are constantly bombarded with the media and paparazzi. The things they do not wish to share with the public should not be leaked for the public's entertainment. The articles tells us that the media covers celebrities' mental health for their antics that we find entertaining. When they do something out of the ordinary or make a bad decision, the paparazzi is on it. We can see their inner life and make fun of the musician or actor or actress or any famous person. It is an invasion of privacy and should fall under a hate crime if it reflects bad status. Anything that celebrities do not wish to share about their personal should not be newsworthy.
4- maybe take out a little information or sentence that was 'extra' information, answers the prompt and has textual evidence
4- good structure and answers the question, but could transition words differently.
Celebrities' personal life should not be spread around the world on social media or over the news unless they agree to have it put out there. Celebrities are really just normal people with a talent that got noticed by someone and then eventually everyone. Just because they're famous, doesn't mean other people can take their information and put it out on public without them knowing. Celebrities shouldn't need "protection" for their personal information, but because of the way the world is today, they should have to be ok or say no to weither or not their information should be allowed for the public to see.
3- maybe use a different word to start the sentence instead of celebrities several times. answers the prompt, few grammar and punctuation errors
3- grammar errors and punctuation, but overall answers the question.
Celebrities are human just like everyone else. I think they should have the rights to the protection of having some privacy. Their business shouldn't have to be announced to the whole world. Although they did chose the famous life. Everyone follows them and their life and is going to want to know what is going on in their lives.
Celebrities deserve their privacy just as much as any normal person. Every person has struggles and obstacles to get over. It is not fair to have it all over the news. Honestly, before having something personal and scaring be shared all over, the media should get permission because it simply is not right. In the article it states, "when they turn self-destructive, they're chided for not taking better care of themselves." When celebrities' life stories are published, they are judged and degraded for making the same bad decisions that the average person might make too.