Mandating the teaching LGBTQ History in schools would be looked down on in Indiana, due to the very religous background. Most of Indiana are corn fields and small hick towns, so most people do not agree with those ideas. If the law is mandated there should be a religous waver that does not force it upon the kids. It could be very wierd for the teacher who is preaching it to them even if they may not beleive in theose beleifs. That is why it should ot be madated into schools.
Indiana would have to factor who would actually benefit from it. Also if it's really worth the cost of buying all new books for the students. And if the parents of the kids would want there children learning about it.
3- There is not much detail or advanced vocab. But, the topic was addressed.
2- Not enough information, could gather more information and evidence from the article to back up the question being asked. Also didn't restate the question.
The LGBTQ history is a resent event. Illinois has already taken steps. Indiana will not start until The results are positive. Illinois is a testing ground. More states will follow after Illinois.
2- Your response was very short, didnt really answer the question about what factors Indiana would need to consider. Also try not to repeat the same word throughout your writing. (Illinois)
2-Didn't restate the question, and didn't pull a lot of information from the article to support themselves.
I think that there are many factors that will have to be considered before Indiana mandates a similar law to Illinois. They should consider the controversy and how people will react. Due to the fact that Indiana is a somewhat religious state, there will most likely be many people protesting against this. Will parents want their children to participate in the class, even if it is mandatory? Will there be teachers that may not want to teach such a controversial topic? They need to consider how sensitive the topic is, and if they have enough history to make a class out of it. These are just a few of the factors that Indiana will need to consider before they mandate the law similar to Illinois.
4- Restates the question , gives plenty of evidence and background feedback. Understands the question and answered it fully.
Indiana is a mostly Republican state, so that off the bat is one thing to be taken into consideration. Most people who live here in Indiana don't agree with those views so, I feel like we would need to be a little more open-minded in the state for it to become a law. It also needs to be taken into consideration that some parent's may not want their child learning LGBT history because of their own political views. There are also students who may not want to take the class because it makes them feel uncomfortable or they too don't agree with it. Illinois just went for it and made it a law. I feel if Indiana went ahead to do that, more people would take the class instead of thinking of what things need to be considered.
4- Good job staying on topic, and restating the issue. Try to keep it argumentative by not using "I". The vocab could be improved but overall,I really enjoyed your response.
3- Didn't restate the question, But upholds factual evidence, but putting to much of an opinion ( using I)
Indiana will not mandate the LGBTQ law because Indiana has a very religious background. If a student or a family wants to learn about this type of history then they will be able to on their own time. Most schools are not going to add another portion to their history classes. LGBTQ is against many religions, that is why there is a low possibility that Indiana will pass this law.
3- You did really good at keeping the response argumentative my not using "I". The topic was what factors need to be considered, I feel like your response was why or why not it will not be passed.
3- Restates the question ,could have added more information but have good facts and evidence in response.
The factors that Indiana would have to take into consideration are what the people would say, like would they agree strongly or would they disagree strongly. When a state makes there laws they always have to understand what the people would think of such a law being past, the state needs the people to work effectively. Another thing that Indiana will have to take into consideration would be the money they would be putting into this program, if they deiced to pass this law then they would have to spend money that could be used to improve the state itself, on things like books and if needed people who are willing to teach it. In my opinion I think it would work because Evansville itself is a very mixed population and that´s just Evansville, there are meany other cities in Indiana that are the same way.
3- You did a good job answering the question in detail. The vocab could be slightly improved. Also, be sure to check your grammar. Use the correct "their" and "passed". Keep your response argumentative by not using "I".
3- Didn't restate the question, but does have good background and evidence answers .
Many factors should be taken into consideration before Indiana could mandate a similar LGBT education law. First of all, the fact that Indiana and its people are much less progressive than Illinois should be considered. Also, instead of forcing people to learn about LGBT history, Indiana should consider making it a choice for all students. State governments may believe that LGBT history is important, but they also have to consider that it conflicts with many of the widely practiced religions such as Christianity and Catholicism. You cannot force a student to learn about something that is against their beliefs. All in all, Indiana should observe how this law affects the people of Illinois before deciding to put it in place or not. They should consider their populations beliefs and feelings before doing this as well.
4- I really enjoyed the detail of your response. You answered the question well and in an argumentative response (avoiding "I"). Your vocab was more advanced than others, but I think can still improve.
4- restates the question being asked. Gives good evidence and background information from the article .
Mainly,we would have to add a class,or possibly revise the ones we have now. Also, it is possible the graduation requirements would be changed,as the class would have to be required. And that brings up the question of the seniors who are about to graduate. Are they going to have to drop one of their classes to take the lgbtq class? And then you have to think about people's beliefs. What if that directly conflicts with how they feel? Are you still going to make them take it? And if it is simply another chapter/unit, will that person have to skip the class?
So honestly,with the amount of logistical,personnel and personal issue with the bill,i do not think that it should be enacted.
3- You had good answers and details in your response. But, you did not restate the question which I feel made you go off topic. You ended with your opinion, making it not be argumentative. Avoid "I" to keep your response argumentative.
3- Didn't restate the question, and also kept asking questions, never fully answered what was being asked.
I believe that there need to be factors put into place when/if we put in these same laws Illinois. I feel that there could be a lot of conserves and misunderstanding with this topic. Because it all depends on the number of factual evidence, and history to put into this class to make it beneficial or not to the students. We need to make it aware of what it is, but also not to teach if it's wrong or right in the instance. I feel that this is a very sensitive subject needs to be talked about in the home atmosphere rather than the school. We would have to look into not offending anyone with this topic. Look into religion and beliefs. I feel that this is way to new to be bringing into a school setting. But this topic does need to be talked about students in the early ages so they do know whats going on with their bodies and hormones. With knowledge it can help people understand what this is, but I feel that this is too touchy to be brought into the school setting.
4- I enjoyed your response. It was well written and a good length. You could always improve vocab and try to avoid using "I" to keep the response argumentative.
Clearly there are many factors that goes into a law like this. There's going to be people upset about this particular law, so dealing with those people will propose a great challenge. Another potential issue is the price for all new history textbooks and workbooks. Some may be inclined to think that the money for said books could go towards repairs for the schools that the students spend 7 to 8 hours a day at.
3- You did a good job at making a point/argument that no one else has made yet. You could add more detail, improve vocab, and restate the question.
3- good spin on answered the question, Restated it but not fully, make it more clear and evidence basted next time.
Before Indiana mandates laws similar to those of Illinois, Indiana should wait and see how this effects Illinois. Not only the short term effects would be taken into consideration, but also the long term. As this is released into schools, one might expect teasing or bullying of some sort over these topics or to people included in LGBT. Not only this but a long term can also effect how people see LGBT citizens. It could take anywhere from 5-30 years to see it normalized and people not even think twice. A lot of students at this age get their opinions based on what their parents think. The new curriculum would need to be out for a good amount of time for a new generation of parents to have their kids learning about LGBT history. It is good for these topics to be taught in school systems, but Indiana should wait and see the cause and effect it has on Illinois before mandating this into it's schools.
4- The topic was restated in multiple places. Your vocab was more advanced than others, but could always improve. You kept your response argumentative by not using "I". Overall, good job!
4- Restated the question, gave really good feedback and evidences based answers.
Some factors that should be taken into consideration before Indiana passes a law like Illinois are the push back that comes with passing this law, how this will religiously effect the community, and if parents really want their child learning the LGBT history. Some of the push back would be from the church and the more religious families, but also from tax payers who are paying for the new LGBT history books or to get the resources to teach this new material so kids could pass the 8th grade. Coming from a religious perspective, teaching LGBT history could go against many religious and could cause an uproar in the many very religious communities in rural Indiana. There is also the thought that maybe parents simply don't think their children are old enough to learn about LGBT history or they just don't agree with it.
4- You restated the topic in the beginning but not at the end so be sure to restate. The vocab could improve but overall, the response remained argumentative and was in good detail.
4- restated the question and had good evidence.
The factors Indiana should look at before mandating a similar law would be the effects it has on class, students, and teachers and if the effects are positive or negative. Indiana should also look into the amount of money it will cost and what changing the curriculum will do. To make time for an LGBTQ unit it will end up cutting down or cutting another unit out completely, so you have to take into account how important replacing a unit will be. In the article it says "the textbooks authorized to be purchased must include the roles and contributions of all people protected under the Illinois Human Right Act" this shows the expences that can come from adding this unit, such as books and research. Indiana should also take the public's opinion into consideration about if they want to learn about it or not.
3- You restated the topic but remember to restate it again at the end. You avoided using "I" which kept the response argumentative. Improve your vocab throughout.
4- restated the quest, gave good feedback and answered the question fully
If Indiana were to mandate a law like this, they should have a poll from parents, students, and teachers. Some parents may not like the idea of this sensitive topic being discussed in the classroom. Also, schools will have to buy new textbooks and get the teachers educated on the subject. The law should be around longer just to see how the students and teachers react to the new topic and tweak some things if need be. If this doesn't work, however, then they should just keep it in an after school club just like the religious clubs.
3- Restate the question in the beginning and the end. Make sure that you stay on the topic of what factors should be taken into consideration instead of what you think needs to be done. Good job on avoiding the use of "I". This keeps the response argumentative.
3- restated the question and gave good feedback, could have added a little more evidence though
The focus that Indiana should take as consideration to mandate the law like Illinois is to look at the amount of students willing to learn or not learn about the history of LGBTQ. How many parents would be willing or unwilling to allow their kids to learn about this certain topic. If it becomes a required subject many kids may switch to private schools and public schools may see a decline in students. Indiana should also wait to see how it effects Illinois and if the effects it has there, would effect Indiana. As LGBTQ is a part of a history month just like black history month and others. It should be many years before Indiana passes that law as more information will be acquired by then. There are many consideration Indiana should take before passing it as a state law.
4- Good job restating the question multiple times. You remained on topic and gave good input and examples. You could always improve vocab. Good job avoiding using "I" to keep the response argumentative.
4- rested the question and gave good evidence to support your clam, just could of had a little more vocab and evidence.
The number one factor that must be taken in to consideration before Indiana try's to mandate this law is they have to think about the effects it will have on the students and the families.For one there is not not very much history that has had a tremendous effect on the State or even the country as a whole. Another thing that they need to consider is the students that do not agree with this. What if a child's family strongly disagrees with people in the LGBTQ community and do not what their child to learn about this. If it is the same rules as Illinois are they going to make it so students cant graduate the eighth grade without taking this class or section is not right. In schools students need to learn important things. As a student I would want to learn more about how this country came to be. Like the founding fathers and the the constitution and our rights. We students need to learn something that is actually worth while. As a personal preference this should not be done students should not learn about it. It is teaching the students that its alright to be gay.
4- You did a good job at restating and answering the question. Could always improve vocab. Remember to check for grammar errors. Try to keep your personal opinion outside of this response to keep it argumentative.
4- restated the question, answered the question and gave really good feedback and evidenced based answers
LGBT history is much like African American history, people died because of something they simply could not control. There are all kinds of people in the world today, and there's not much representation for the many minorities we have in our society. Indiana shouldn't take anyone's negative opinions into consideration, they should think about all people. If a person made a big enough impact on our world today then their entire story deserves to be told.
3- Remember to restate the question. If you restate, I think that will help you stay on topic. Improve vocab. You did make good points in your response and avoided "I", keeping it an argumentative response.
2- didn't restate the question, or had back up information to support your answered.
What should be considered before mandanting the same law as Illinois is the LGBT youth themselves. How to protect them against bulling and prejudice. When the law is there is going to be some parents and kids with different opinions. Who might think the best way to get back at this law is get back at the people of the community. Which is of course not the way to go.
School's should work at making the environment a safe place for these youths. Bulling shouldn't be taken as a light fight and instead do something about it. If not things might go out of hand. No matter what there is going to be those against it and those who will act out against it. Safety measures should be taken in order to ensure nothing gets too out of hand. Everyone has the right to their opinion, but no one should be hurt for simply being themselves.
3- rested the question, and had good evidenced facts.
Many factors would have to be considered before there would be a bill to put LGBT history like the one in Illinois, mainly the political ideas and religious beliefs of Hoosiers. The only time a democrat has won Indiana in the general election for the presidency in the last is Barack Obama in 2008. Many people who want the bill in other states are voting for the democrats, so there is a political divide with this bill going to Indiana. Also, Indiana is very religious, mainly, they are Christians, which opposes same sex marriage, so there would be a big religious divide. Finally, Indiana has the lowest pay for teachers in the entire US, and they may not be able to afford new books for the new class subjects. If they were to put in a bill that is similar, they should implement it in the early high school level (9th-10th grade level).
3- restated the question, has good support but could have added more.
Now that the idea is out we will have to actually see who all would want the bill to pass, because the government could have large riots in Indy with the wrong laws passed.
2-didn't restate the question and no evidence.
The factors that Indiana should take in on teaching LGBT in history classes is that, is this going to work for Illinois, if this doesn't work for Illinois is it going to work for Indiana? What Indiana also has to take in the consideration is that the people that live in Indiana, Indiana is more of a town that all we know is corn fields and following our ancestors and that the people who live in Illinois are different, and in the end the outlook of what this might do for our state, is it going to be a positive impact or a negative impact. Indiana also needs to take in consideration that peoples beliefs or religions has a big impact on what is going to end up happening and is this a good idea or not.
4- restated the question and had good support evidenced
A few factors that must be taken into consideration before we follow this rule is to most importantly see how it works in Illinois. If Illinois schools get no where with this class and the kids just use this class as a joke. If kids are not impacted by this class then we should not move to all states if kids are just going to use this class to amuse their selves. Also they should be able to refuse this class if it came the Indiana because this goes against many religions and parents might feel that this class will have a negative impact of their children.
3- restated the question , and gave good factual based answers
Certain factors must be taken in to consideration before Indiana could mandate a similar law to the Illinois law. Firstly, Indiana needs to consider that this law would not be a whole class on LGBT+ beliefs, or a situation where it would be preached to the students so they would be forced to think those beliefs are right. It would simply be a unit describing the long (and mostly not talked about) history of LGBT+ people around the world, much like the unit on the civil rights era that we already have. Indiana would also have to consider the financial implications of this bill. Secondly, this law requires the purchase of textbooks for all schools that include a section on LGBT+ history. Indiana also should consider it's own history, which hasn't been the friendliest towards minorities (see the Religious Freedom Restoration Act). Indiana could benefit from mandating this law but should consider many factors first.
3- didn't clearly restate the question but gave good feedback
Many factors would have to be taken before Indiana could mandate a similar law to the Illinois law. Illinois school would have to evaluate feedback from students and teachers to know how important it is to teach this topic in schools. Indiana would have to factor in all the costs it takes for Illinois to implement this new curriculum into schools, such as new textbooks. In addition, Illinois would see how parents reacted to this new law, because some parents may not want their kid to be taught this in school, such as sex ed. The article states, "It is my hope that teaching students about the valuable contributions LGBTQ individuals have made throughout history will create a safer environment with fewer incidents of harassment." Illinois would have to monitor if more students feel safe about this topic and less students are bullied. With these variables, Indiana should carefully see how the law goes in Illinois and should consider waiting a while or indefinately before implementing a law similar to this.
4-restated the question, gave good evidenced and supported your answers.
The state of Indiana should consider understand that it was too early in LGBTQ history to implement something like teaching it in our history books. We as a country just started implementing laws like allowing gay marriage and this makes the whole subject way to sensitive to be teaching children. There should be a wait of at least 10 years before lawmakers start even considering making laws and bills like mandating the implementation of LGBTQ history in textbooks.
3- restated the question but needs more evidence behind it.
One factor is no one would take that class. Even if it "helps bullying", there are truly sick people on this earth that would still harass others about their personality.
2- didn't restate the question, or give it any evidence behind it
The law in Illinois was made to keep the LGBTQ+ community history from being ignored. In consideration of adopting the law, maybe wait and see people react to the law in Illinois, and use that to help decide if it could be beneficial here. If the law goes over well in Illinois, we should consider possibly applying the same law but on a lesser scale if needed, or even with a different age group. The law wouldn't be a bad idea in means to keep the LGBTQ+ community active and not as ignored, however, Indiana would need to consider what would need to be added or removed to avoid as much backlash as possible within the state.
3- restated the question, and gave good evidence but could have been more supportive
For Indiana to even consider the LGBTQ law that Illinois passed, they would have to see how many people in schools and of all school levels would benefit from that knowledge. This is because if it is not done in an area with a community where is not relevant, it won’t do as well. But, with how much has been happening worldwide with discrimination and other tragedies, it would be best and more beneficial to teach them the historical background and problems faced today and then. Another thing would be getting things in place such as festivals, a system in the schools, and so on to make everything give them the feeling of equality.
4- restated the question and gave good feedback, could have added more evidence
In order to even consider mandating a similar law to the one passed in Illinois, Indiana must first take in consideration the results academically and socially from the Illinois students. If the system doesn't incite any change in Illinois schools, it's likely that it won't have any affect in Indiana schools either. Secondly, Indiana should also take into consideration the reactions of the Hoosiers who live here. Indiana is, unfortunately, a much less progressive state, and many of our residents hold strong religious beliefs, so there is bound to be some sort of uproar if this law was implemented. It would be smart to first make sure that the negative reactions of the people wouldn't, for example, alter the enrollment rate at schools who offer LGBT history in their courses - and to combat this, schools could send out permission forms regarding the LGBT unit as a way to pacify parents who don't want their child to learn about it.
3- could have restated the question more clearly, could have added more evidence and been more descriptive in your writing. ( sorry didn't see this one!