None of these things really have anything to do with my personal life, but I have several men and boys in my family and an allure of high risk activity is in them all. My cousins and uncles are constantly doing dangerous and what I consider stupid things like climbing a tree too high or swimming in a river that's too deep. They always keep me on my toes and cause me and the other women in my family to worry if they're gone for too long.
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The allure of high risk activites has always provoked me to do some dumb and dangrouse things. It the advetnure and the want to prove everbody wrong. Something about the "Ha told you I could do it." that is so satisfying. Even tho with being able to do that most of the time there is a risk involved. But you got one life and we are all going to die one day so why not.
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The theme that holds the most relevance to me would be the charged bond between father and son. This theme means the most to me because I know how important it is to have a good bond with a father. A father and son bond is very important to success and achieving big things. I know this because my relationship with my father is very good and he has taught me almost everything I know.
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In the authors note, Krakauer's identifies three themes which are: grip of the wilderness, allure high risk activity, and charged bond of father/son. Although, I personally am not an outdoorsy person at all but I can relate to the high risk activity statement the most. In life, living on the edge, no matter what is it, brings excitement into your life. Adrenaline is what me and my friends live for and what we spend most of our weekends looking for. Whether its something scary, climbing a building, or just running around at night we love to love the rush. I think that's partly what Christopher Johnson is looking for as well.
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The concept that holds the most relevance to me is allure of high risk activty. This concept holds the most relevance to me because my friends and I sometimes get into high risk activities. They may not be as high risk as what teenage boys do, but I feel like some of the things we do would be high risk. I can also relate because my little cousins are all boy, everything that they do is high risk activity. When anyone is around them, they cause so much stress because they think that they are going to get hurt.
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In my opinion, the theme that holds the most relevance to me is the grip of the wilderness. Personally, the wilderness is something I would never live in and venture into alone. There are things that kill. If any person were to go into the wilderness alone, then that person should know the dangers. Grip of the wilderness is important because there is a drastic difference in the wild and a city. If one can not get a grip on how the wilderness works, then that person will most likely perish. That is why I think grip of the wilderness is the most relevant. It is something you must make prepare for.
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Of Krakauer's three themes, the one concept that holds the most relevance to me is the grip of the wilderness. This theme holds the most relevance because as a younger kid and even now I love going into forests or rocky areas to explore. I would climb every cool tree or rock just to find the tallest foothold and look at everything below me. The mere concept of just sitting out in nature and surveying my surroundings is exhilarating.
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The allure of high risk activity holds some relevance with me. Many would claim that figure skating is not "high risk", but I disagree. Every day, we take hard falls, sustaining injury after injury, but we persist. Personally, last summer, I competed at National Showcase on a sprained ankle. Although it was close to being broken, I competed all of my jumps to the best of my ability. The riskiness of competing on a sprained ankle made the competition all the better. It was that day I knew I could do whatever I put my mind to. Although other people may not think to compare figure skating to this story, figure skaters gain confidence from completing a new skill that many would be afraid to try.
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The allure of high risk activity holds the most relevance in my life. It holds the most relevance because I don't always do the smart thing, and then sometimes get hurt. One example in my life is when I was 12, I was riding my bike down the street. I saw a big concrete sewer drain, and thought it would be a good idea to try and ride my bike off of it. It ended with me having a broken nose. Another example is this past summer, I was driving around at night, "because driving is fun" was my reason, but I had a headlight out. I was driving in a wooded area and a deer ran out in front of me and I hit it. Those are some examples of how I was lured into high risk situations, and the outcomes from it.
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Through Krakauer's three identified themes, the grip of the wilderness, is one that holds the most relevance to me. Adventure is something that excites me, whether it be hiking or zip-lining. It's the feeling of exhilaration and little to no control that is beyond fascinating and addicting. Once you conquer your fear and do something, if you had a feeling of euphoria, you will most likely want to do it again. The grip of the wilderness shows how you can get addicted to that feeling and just want to consume it.
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The concept that holds the most relevance to me is the allure of high-risk activities. My favorite outdoor hobby is downhill long-boarding. To start you find a really tall hill, it has to be a concrete path or road. Then you go to the top with your long board and go down it. Its a adrenaline sport and if you mess up you can get hurt, whether its by car or a slide. If you take all the precaution your still one a elongated skateboard going twenty to thirty miles an hour. The adrenaline is the main reason I do this.
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A father and son bond is something I am proud to have with my dad. He has been there for me and my sister our whole lives. The feeling of getting to go to baseball games with him so seeing how much he enjoys relish's being there with me and not because he is at a baseball game but the the quality time he has with me. I'm not home that much anymore so he cherishes the time we spend, even if it is just sitting on the couch watching television. Has done things for us that we don't even know about, sitting up late at night figuring out how he is going to handle being a single dad or is he raising us right. I can tell you he did the best he could and if a lot of dads were just half the dad he is they would be lucky. Most people would call him a hero but I get to call him dad.
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The allure of a high risk activity holds the closest to my personal experiences. Playing sports and doing extra activities are the start of chasing after the adrenaline rush of waking up in the forest with no communication, food, or water. What draws me into playing sports is the risk of getting injured or making big plays that will be noticed. I don't do it for the same reason as McCandless in the forest, but i do it for the pure enticement of fast pace activities and how it's high risk-high reward.
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With three themes formed within Into the Wild one holds the most relevant to me. The theme of grip of the wilderness holds the most relevance to me. This is true because I spend most of my time outdoors. Almost all of my outings with peers and family are outside adventures. The main ones consisting of walking and hiking. This adventures help me develop a connection to the beauty of nature and the outdoors.
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The concept of a charged bond between father and son is what holds the most relevance to my life. There comes a point in everyone's life when you realize that you can't necessarily trust or agree with everything your father says. That turning point is often the cause for a lot of emotional turmoil and disagreements with one another.
For me personally this moment came when I realized my father would never love me or my siblings as much as he loves himself and that we would always be side characters in the story of his life as far as he was concerned. We were only people who he may come to miss when we left but he would never do anything to make staying worth the trouble either.
Of course, there are worse things he's done and worse things he can do but I can't pretend that from his point of view I'm most likely responsible for as much of the distance as he is.
The theme that holds most relevance to me is the allure of high risk activity. This theme holds most relevance to me because I love the sense of adventure and adrenaline. When I am bored I do not want to just sit around, I want to go out and do something thrilling. Through doing high risk activities you sometimes create your greatest memories and even become closer to the people you do them with. In the article the author talks about how Chris goes into the wild with less than the essentials needed for his trip. Knowing he will be struggling and may not have food. This shows that he was all in for the adventure and the memory of the trip. Through this trip he was trying to figure something out about himself, the same thing goes when you are doing high risk activities. Occasionally when doing something slightly dangerous it helps you to figure out a part of you.
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Karkauer has three themes in his book. These themes are grip of the wilderness, allure of high risk activity, and charged bond between father and son. The one that most relates to me is grip of the wilderness. I think this is like me because i live by the woods and grew up playing in the woods. I used to build forts and explore. I used to run through the creeks trying to catch little minnow fish scavenging through the stream. I love to camp out in a hammock high up in trees along with building bonfires and being with the unknown at night.
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Growing up outside can alter our imaginations as we age. They say your mind confines and immerses itself in what it is surrounded by, especially when we enjoy whatever it is. As a child others would stay inside and watch TV or play one of their games on their super cool brand new Xbox. But I would be out exploring in the timber just behind my house, looking under rocks for the little slimy salamanders just so I could catch one and go show my mom this exciting discovery. And even today being in the wilderness still sparks my imagination in such amazing ways.
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In my personal experiences, the concept that holds the most relevance to me is the theme, grip of the wilderness. There is nothing like being in the wilderness and the great outdoors. The outdoors hold beautiful views of mountains and green plains. It holds fun activities like camping, hiking, and backpacking. It has adventures of swimming, or discovering new terrain. From all of the breathtaking views, to the exhilarating things to be involved in. These fun activities and magnificent views are why many people are involved in the grip of the wilderness, and why this concept holds the most relevance to me.
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Krakaur introduced three key messages through the story. One being, "grip of the wilderness, another being "allure of high risk activity", and the final one being "father son bond". The concept that most touches me personally is the bond of a father and son. In the story you get the vibe that things didn't go well between Alex and his father, possibly sending him on a wildlife bender. Personally I've felt that point of breaking that Alex has, my father went through a time period of addiction and kept falling deeper and deeper into an abyss of self hate and failure. He was caught and taken away for a short amount of time. But future dates could call for him to be taken much much longer. I grew up a daddy's girl and processing the world without my hero is a challenge I'm not ready to face. When such a big part of your life is lost or rotting away isolation does seem sensational.
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Of Krakauer's three identified themes, the one I can best relate to is the grip of the wilderness. I can relate to this theme because of my time in parks and hunting grounds where the forest seemingly remains untouched. This part of the wilderness holds many beauties that can not be found anywhere else. Much like McCandless, I love the outdoors and all of the wonders hidden within it like the glistening of leaves after a light rain, the smell of wildflowers that fills the air during spring, or the sight of a fawn trailing it's mother through the trees are all reasons why I love the outdoors and think that I can best relate to the grip of the wild.
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The identified theme that holds the most relevance to me personally, is the allure of high risk activity. To lead the same life day in and day out is boring, but it is what we have to do. Everyday, waking up at the same time every morning for school, going home getting ready for work, coming home to finish up homework, and then finally going to sleep. Going through these actions every day without even thinking twice about it is what we are use to. However, life can present some very compelling opportunities that seem almost irresistible to pass up. For example, when my best friend asked me if I wanted to go sky-diving with her. Sky-diving had never crossed my mind as something I would ever do. However, the attractiveness of doing something that seemed so crazy and high risk was appealing to me. This is why I believe that I relate so closely to the allure of high risk activities.
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Out of Krabkauer's three identified themes, the one that holds the most relevance to me is "charged bond of father/son". This identified theme is mostly relevant to me because ever since I can remember I have done everything with my dad. He has been the biggest supporter, teacher, idle, and most importantly my biggest friend. My best memory with my father is when I was younger and we were out fishing and my dad fell into the water when a fish was fighting on the line super hard. With all that being said, my father is a great man and I strive one day I can be half the man he is.
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Out of Krabkauer's three identified themes, the one that holds the most relevance to me is allure of high risk activity. My whole life I have always been an "adrenaline junkie" and I have always loved thrill seeking and adventures. Whether it be riding roller coasters, to cliff jumping, I am fascinated by "high risk" activities. The feeling you get is unlike any other, and I believe that is why I so closely relate to the allure of high risk activity.