We as a community have a responsibility to returning soldiers to comfort them and make sure we have proper programs and medication. Soldiers go out by the hundreds of thousands and defend our country seeing horrible things daily while they're deployed, so, as their friends and loved ones, it's our responsibility. The suicide count for returning veterans is far too high in this day and age for all of the technological advances we have. Having multiple options of support for a veteran with PTSD makes it easier for them to feel comfortable in choosing one that's right for them and will actually end up helping.
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I believe the main responsibility society has for our soldiers is validation. From July 28, 1914 to now, the soldiers of america have returned with with a rather unfortunate mental state from having to witness war and death. It wasn't until 1980 that PTSD was recognized as a real disorder. Today's day in age is extremely alert and involved with mental disorders and is always on the move to find new ways to treat them. That in its self is validating however we as people who co-exist with those scarred by war can take care of the more simple things such as showing respect, if they have a service dog leave it be, and finally contain our morbid humor that engulfs social media and young teens brains today.
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I believe that society's responsibility to our soldiers returning home with scars from battle is more studies. More studies on PTSD can help bring more awareness and better help those who suffer from it. If we can better understand this condition, then we will know the correct steps to take in medical advancements regarding PTSD. We should offer returning soldiers free medical help and therapy. PTSD is a real thing that shouldn't be ignored or swept under the rug. In order for our returning soldiers to contribute efficiently in society, we have to help them overcome their PTSD.
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Our society owes a great deal to our active and veteran military personnel for their sacrifices. They go over and risk their lives so you and your family can lay in peace at night. We need to welcome them home in warm arms and let them know they are greatly appreciated. Military personnel do the most and are usually over looked. As a society we need to take care of the people that take care of us and make sure they come home and be treated like they just protected it.
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Society has a responsibility to returning soldiers to help them recover from any physical or mental scarring. Mentally, many soldiers return home with a level of PTSD. As a society, we must provide resources for these soldiers to cope and thrive as a human being. Some soldiers may become physically sick as an effect of PTSD. To care for these wounded warriors, we must provide them with adequate services to help them heal mentally, as well as physically, to prevent the illness from resurfacing. While PTSD is not truly curable, with outstanding professional help, they could be less in pain.
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I believe that as we, as a society, begin to develop a better understanding of not only the physical but the mental impacts of war that we ought to establish safety nets for our veterans. We've all seen the signs held by beggars on the street saying "Homeless Vet Please Help" or any variation of that statement pleading with those of us who are better off to give them some amount of the aid they should have received in the first place.
Government organizations like the VA are set up with the intention of helping veterans but the organization is underfunded and often poorly staffed making it easy for many to fall through the cracks in our system.
So, this begs the question, how do we help these people especially those who are likely to fall through the cracks? Do we set up more support groups? Required therapy for veterans who have been in and around combat zones? I can't say for sure but I do know that we can't keep blindly using a system that clearly isn't cutting it.
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For centuries, people who have risked their lives in battle have struggled with "wounds no surgeon ever saw." PTSD is a mental disorder that many soldiers endure after returning from war. As a society, we have improved on taking care of soldiers who have this disorder, but there is still a debate on whether or not it is society's responsibility to do this. Because soldiers put their lives at stake for the sake of the country's freedom, society should take in the responsibility of caring for them. They sacrifice for the country, so the country should do something in return. Mental health specialists should be freely available for veterans and active soldiers. Mental health checks should be administered regularly. If they are willing to put their lives on the line, the government and its people should be willing to help with the aftereffects.
The responsibility society has for scarred soldiers would be to get them treatment rather than push them away. Back then, soldiers that had deserted their position were called deserters and sentenced to death if caught. No one knows how many of those soldiers were suffering from PTSD. Today, this situation is treated more seriously but there are too many gaos in what we know about PTSD. Society needs to create a system quickly in order effectively identify and treat soldiers that are suffering.
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The responsibility that society has for returning soldiers is to tend to all problems of the body and the mind. They endangered their own lives for us. They went to distant place to shield you, your children, your family. When they come back the least we can do is help them. A lot of them risked their lives for this country, we can surely pay for them to get the help they need.
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Our society holds many responsibilities towards the soldiers who have returned from battle, mostly suffering from PTSD. These soldiers in particular have endured the most haunting experiences, referring to Richard B. O'Connor's article, "War means something to those of us that have looked through the sights of a rifle at another human being's face." This specific quote describes the scarring occurrence of what the soldiers have to face when in battle and how they were extremely affected by it. Our society should be able to provide medical services to those who have mentally suffered, and possibly even housing. The soldiers should be aided for their sacrifice in our country's safety.
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When soldiers return from battle, it is a big change. Expecially if they are scarred. They come home being use to fire fight and people wanting to kill them. So most vets want to analyz everybody to see if they are a threat or not. So big crowds can be scary and society shoud know if sombody is having a attack to give them space and get out of the are, becuase he may try to defend himself. Also if you know them watch for signs of depression and anxiety, and try to convince them to get help.
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Our society today mostly disregards our soldiers. A lot of people show little to no respect because they might not know what those soldiers actually go through. These people that return are sometimes mentally hurt by the gruesome images they've seen in their past, as flashbacks these memories are very real to them. As a society we should all learn to respect and care for our veterans. Making them feel at home and feel peace when they return should be our responsibility knowing what they endure every day for our country's freedom.
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As American citizens we owe a lot to the soldiers who are constantly defending our freedoms. Therefore, we are responsible as a society to take care of and love the soldiers who return changed and scarred from the battles that took place over seas. That is why there are treatment centers where vets can seek help as well as receive treatments for psychological damage but most soldiers don't like to admit that they have an issue so they dismiss it. This is why if you see a soldier struggling you should help them and if they have a service dog, give them space. Soldiers give a lot which is why American citizens are responsible for taking care of them when they come home.
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Our society has a major responsibility to protect our soldiers when they return home from battle. Dating back, twenty seven centuries, soldiers returned with berserk. Berserk means fighting with recklessly and disregard for their own life. But, in modern times, PTSD is a concept of traumatic neurosis, which needs to be respected by the Citizens. The Citizens of the United States need to be responsible, and help aid our Veterans through these times. We can aid them by, using tax money to help them recover safely. We need to give them respect when their neurological disease takes control of their body.
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Many soldiers who return home are scarred from battle, and are often times diagnosed with Post Traumatic Stress Disorder (PTSD.) Society for centuries did nothing for the soldiers, often times because the disorder couldn't be identified physically. The text states this as, "For centuries, thousands of Soldiers who went into harm's way to fight the nation's wars returned home with wounds no surgeon ever saw." In my opinion, society has a large responsibility to help soldiers who return from battle with PTSD. Starting in World War 1, doctors were issued to the front of battles, to help soldiers with mental and physical issues. While this was a great start, and lessened the percentage if soldiers who returned with the disorder, society needs to do more to help the veterans. In the quote, it is states that, "Thousands of Soldiers who went into harm's way to fight the nation's wars." These veterans are risking their lives, and in my opinion, the society need to do more to help those scarred from battle.
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Society has various responsibilities for the soldiers who return home scarred from battle. The Army defines the collateral damage that soldiers face during war as, "unintentional or incidental damage." This means that effects occurring as a result of military actions is not purposeful. Only a certain group of people understand what it is like to experience the harsh deaths, the scared faces, and the lifeless bodies that soldiers have to experience while away at war. So, our job as a society and nation is to help the soldiers move past the awful things they have had to see and face in their heads everyday. Providing them with medicine, therapy, funds, and shelter are just a few things we should provide for them. Only each individual soldier knows what does on in their head and they things they see on repeat as a side effect of PTSD. So, It is our responsibility as a nation to help try to nurture these soldiers back to the mental health they once had.
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The responsibility that society has to our soldiers who return scarred from battle is gratitude. Society is what our soldiers are fighting for, so the least that we can do is make them feel loved. Since the first war or battle, men and women have been scarred from what they have saw. An Iraq veteran said "Collateral damage is different for us" and he's talking about those who have been to war. PTSD has been around forever, and over time we have gotten better with treating it.
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The responsibility society has for soldiers who return scarred from battle is to make them feel welcomed and loved. When a soldier returns from battle they have seen things many can only imagine. Many feel alone and scared for their life. As a society we need to make sure these people feel welcome, loved, and know they can talk about what happened. The article "A look in the review mirror" explains that we have little research on PTSD and are still trying to figure out how to fix it. These people just returned from war where they lost many people they though of as brothers. Our society needs to ensure that they are doing well and feel like they are able to talk to others.
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Society has a big responsibility on troops returning home from battle. Many veterans feel outcast from everyone else whenever they come back home because of their trauma. People should welcome veterans and try to help them whenever they get back. People who don't suffer from PTSD do not really know how it affects someone so they should try and support them in whatever way they can.
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The society has various responsibilities for soldiers that have returned from battle scarred. They have been mentally and physically effected and, as the text says, have "unintentional and incidental damage". The article says, "War means something different to those of us that have looked through the sights of a rifle at another human beings face." They are seen things unimaginable to normal citizens and have these images haunting them forever. Because they have been facing these problems, people in the society should take them in account and understand the serious problems they are facing. I believe that opening up therapy sessions or classes for former soldiers could be beneficial. They could relay there thoughts and hurt onto someone else who could possibly help them move forward. Society should help nurture, support, and encourage soldiers to get back to a healthy state of mind.
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PTSD has always been common among soldiers returning from fighting for our country. Psychiatrist Jonathan Shay even implies to us that "PTSD has been around as long as war itself". Even though soldiers may come back with no physical damage, they may have mental problems that are just has harming as having a physical condition. With knowing this, our society owes it to soldiers, the people fighting for our country and making America a safe place to live, to help them when they get back from battle. America needs to care and provide them with the right medical attention to make sure they are in good condition both physically and mentally, and if they aren't, they need to be given the right help.
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I think that the responsibility we have to our soldiers who return scarred from battle is we need to treat them with high honor. They went through hell just so that we could stay at home without any worry of an enemy attack. The soldiers that came back often have conditions like PTSD from all the shocks of war. If they need or seek help, they should get the help they deserve. Without any hassle or meaningless squabbling over how they might pay for the service.
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The responsibility of our soldiers is to protect us and our beliefs, but what responsibilities should we have to protect them from from the scars of battle? We as the society that is being protected by our soldiers should look to support them in all ways that we can. One way that we can help battle scarred militants is to provide mental help for those who may return home from war with scars that aren't able to be mended through conventional means. It was said by an Iraq veteran in New Jersey that " Collateral damage means something different to those of us that have seen the lifeless body of a 9-year-old girl caught in the crossfire. Or for those of us that have struggled to save the life of a 7-yearold boy." With this example of what soldiers do for us it is clear that something needs to be done for them in light of the carnage they experienced in battle.
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Our responsibility as a society is to support the soldiers that have come back from war that are scarred. I believe this because they served us and put their life at risk for our safety so lets protect theirs when they get back. With PTSD being around for over 2,000 years. We have to be here for them when they get back. Also society's responsibility for our soldiers is to protect them before they get to the point of being scarred. If there was a way our society could come to an agreement to not leave our soldiers at war for to long, the problem may go down. Then society and everyone could win.
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As a whole society, I believe that we fail to think about things such as our military who are not physically wounded, but mentally wounded. People are so wrapped up in their own problems that they forget to think about topics such as our military's mental health. Society should offer a solution to those who return scarred from battle. At the minimum there should be outlets for mental help such as therapy for those soldiers. These help outlets should be easy to reach and affordable. Soldiers should not have to go through everyday life struggling to get through these unimaginably hard times without the help of society.
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Our responsibility as a society for the soldiers who have returned scarred from a battle is to support them and be there for them. They went away and risked their life, so we should support them when they get back. I think to provide them with mental help, would be great!
I believe our responsibility as a society is to support the soldiers upon their return and while in battle. Many soldiers suffer from various mental illnesses such as PTSD for well over 2,000 years. This being said they need all the assistance and reassurance they can get from us as a whole. We can start this by providing better and more effective counselors and therapists with little to no trouble or wait. Doing this will ensure soldiers find a way to cope with such traumatic illnesses.